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it's always half past somewhere

the silver lining in the shade

By Oneg In The ArcticPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
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i fall

it's half past too late

the thick shades are drawn shut

the air lingers heavy in the dim ray of light still trying to trickle through

everything feels like too much and not enough

emotion too wild

wavering safety, collapsing stability

street lights flicker announcing the arriving darkness

the refrigerator hums too loud

the dissociative kind of loud

the "it's too late to stop this" kind of loud

the weight of the world lies heavy like lead-filled bones in overcrowded cemeteries

the slivered moon glistens, a glow in tunnel vision

~

it's been too long a night already

~

while stars fire-fly the night sky canvas

dreams of bigger worlds make slumber an infinite adventure

while drifting away on cloud-like comfort, floating peacefully beyond

eyes barely blink, innocently, simplicity

peeking at a new day

a freshness, a haziness that blurs into focus

there's a sweetness in the dew-drop

air filters through along with a growing ray of sunlight

before the weightless shades are flung wide open

it's half past too early

so i rise

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About the Creator

Oneg In The Arctic

A storyteller and poet of arctic adventures, good food, identity, mental health, and more.

Co-founder of Queer Vocal Voices

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  • Joe O’Connor5 days ago

    Really liked “the weight of the world lies heavy like lead-filled bones in overcrowded cemeteries”, and the contrast between falling and rising is nicely done Oneg😊

  • Kelsey Clareyabout a month ago

    "everything feels like too much and not enough" is such a hard-hitting line. Great work and congrats on the challenge win!

  • The Dani Writer2 months ago

    There is soooo much in this poem. Like 'lessons within lessons' much. I wanna sit and let it filter through me, highlighting the parts of my physical, mental, and emotional anatomy that need it. This can be a chaotic classroom if we let it. A reminder that I own my calm, my clarity, and if I don't...I better get a move on, cuz it's already "half past too late/early." Glad you got it and it was recognised 😊 Kudos and well done with your win here, Oneg!

  • Amanda Starks2 months ago

    Your word-choice and lyrical prose in this is masterful and I am in awe!! Congrats on your placement, Oneg!! <3

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • River Joy2 months ago

    🖤🖤 congrats

  • Gabriel Huizenga2 months ago

    I really, really love this poem. So many incredible lines, and absolutely striking to read the inverse and see everything turned around so perfectly. "...while stars fire-fly the night sky canvas," and "everything feels like too much and not enough," are two of my favorites. And even the picture you chose being a perfect split between colors of sky perfectly represents the duality of this poem- I can't say enough how good it is!!

  • Randy Baker2 months ago

    Congratulations on placing in the inverse challenge! Well done!

  • D.K. Shepard2 months ago

    Congrats! An inverse full of strong imagery! Well done!

  • Trishawn Blake2 months ago

    Fabulous work! Keep up the great job! ❤️

  • Anna 2 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳

  • Ashley Shiflett2 months ago

    Wow! What a beautiful poem. Love the imagery! ❤️ 😍

  • Carol Townend2 months ago

    I can relate to this easily, especially with the many sleepless nights I endure.

  • mark mugo2 months ago

    yeah dat's right

  • olymoolla2 months ago

    Your stat is challenging your story is so beautiful you write like this you will be a great writer I wish and yes one more thing please open my vocal id and a story come later

  • Manisha Dhalani2 months ago

    Congrats on top story!

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Melissa Ingoldsby2 months ago

    I love this piece and I feel the intensity and rawness, very eloquently done ✅ my friend! Congratulations on top story you deserve it 🤩🥰💗♥️💕💓

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    Congrats on the TS.

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Fabulous!! Love it!!!💕♥️♥️ Congratulations on Top Story!!!

  • Caroline Jane2 months ago

    The threads in this weave together beautifully. I love the fridge humming part and lead bones. Great imagery.

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    This is gorgeous. I love the transition from night to day and day to night. Beautifully written.

  • Celia in Underland2 months ago

    Beautifylly crafted both ways! I loved the reference yo the fridge - so many times in sleepless ness that damn noise has haunted me awake- that or the bloody tick f a clock! Such amazing imagey and wonderfully written 🤍

  • The heaviness of this poem is all too relatable but absolutely beautiful. You've really made the world visible especially with, "the slivered moon glistens, a glow in tunnel vision". I loved this!

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