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The Prose Teacher

A micro fiction

By Shane DobbiePublished 9 months ago Updated 9 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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A time ago there was once -

‘No. Again!’

The rod whipped through the air and across my knuckles, drawing blood. It dripped through my fingers onto my keyboard.

‘Your prose clunks like a pianist playing bad notes. A great pianist loses their audience in the music; their craft is invisible.’

She tapped my keyboard. ‘This is your instrument. The reader cares not how you type, just the words you play. They should not, like bad notes, draw attention to themselves. Again!’

Once upon a time…

I hesitate.

She nods. ‘Better. Much better. Continue.’

Short StoryHorror
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About the Creator

Shane Dobbie

If writing is a performance art then I’m tap dancing in wellies.

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    Creative use of language & vocab

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    Well-structured & engaging content

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    Original narrative & well developed characters

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    Arguments were carefully researched and presented

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

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  • Stephanie J. Bradberry9 months ago

    Simply superb. I'm glad I got to see that magical sentence in action (The rod whipped through the air and across my knuckles, drawing blood.).

  • J. Jay9 months ago

    Getting Whiplash vibes. Great work

  • F. Leonora Solomon9 months ago

    oh gosh, Shane, i connect with this story more than i even want to! 😉

  • Phil Flannery9 months ago

    Man! I hope 'she' is a metaphor for your own drive to be better, otherwise you need to change classes. Still you should have put a trigger warning for all of us catholic school survivors. Just kidding.

  • Heather N King9 months ago

    Wow. I felt this in my soul and fingers. We’ve all been there. Keep writing! You got this. 😉

  • Test9 months ago

    Hahaha. I think that Prose Teacher has tenure in my head. Great stuff!

  • J. Delaney-Howe9 months ago

    Great story. I'm glad I never had a teacher like that. I am old enough to have taken a typing class in high school!

  • Ayyan Khanani9 months ago

    Congratulations!!! Check out some of my writings too <3

  • J. S. Wade9 months ago

    I always wondered what happened to Mrs. Jones. 🤣 Great story Shane.Congratulations 🥇

  • Loryne Andawey9 months ago

    Whoohoo! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Caroline Jane9 months ago

    This is great! Congratulations ❤️

  • Congratulations on your Top Story✨💖🎉

  • Gal Mux9 months ago

    I felt this one...

  • Ahamed Thousif9 months ago

    Amazing work Shane!!! and congratz on Top Story.

  • Dana Stewart9 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story, Shane!

  • Stephanie Hoogstad9 months ago

    This is relatable, hilarious, and a bit horrifying. Great work.

  • Kendall Defoe 9 months ago

    Ouch? Ah, the dangers of clichés... I wouldn't touch one with a ten-foot pole... Thwack! Great Top Story!

  • Lisa Herdman9 months ago

    Congrats on top story! I really love this challenge and the great stories it brings out.

  • Great story and congratulations on your top story

  • Dana Crandell9 months ago

    Ouch. Congratulations!

  • AngelBee9 months ago

    I'm not gonna lie I really like this! I like how short this is but yet very interesting.

  • Melissa Ingoldsby9 months ago

    Ohh excellent ❤️❤️❤️

  • Heather Hubler9 months ago

    Ouch, I've been cracked across the knuckles before in school, but this is another level, lol. And blood is flying for the first line? brutal Congratulations on Top Story!

  • JBaz9 months ago

    Congratulation. I guess you put the coma in the correct place. 😉

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