My dear,
take my hand and hear (if you can),
for I know you fade away.
We felt that life was oh so long
'til we saw, we knew, deep down
Time was up.
So, my soul, my love
let's leap
hand and hand
into the long, cold, dark
You know our fire will burn like the sun...
Have no fear.
Know no pain.
Just rest.
This love will keep us warm.
About the Creator
Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
Work in Progress: WOWH, cozy mystery (paranormal elements)
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Comments (30)
I truly wish I could write poetry, it is pieces like yours that inspires me to try. Heartbreaking sad yet so beautiful and uplifting.
This piece of writing is a masterpiece. I must admit that I was captivated by it and truly enjoyed every word.
Lovely and comforting and brave 😁❤
You captured this so well. Very good work Donna
Beautiful! ❤️
Thank you!❤️
I feel this deep down. Thank you! 💙
Like a prayer...
nice work keep going sister
This is so real and hits so close to the feelings of loved ones on the way home. Like a picture postcard of goodbyes and hope for the coming reunion. Sadly beautiful.
Gorgeous, Donna! Is there a love more true than the one you have at the very last moment? Reminded me of my grandparents that passed within hours of each other. This is a winner in my book!
Oh so beautiful Donna ❤️❤️ Loved this ❤️
Lovely and so sentimental. Nice poem, Donna💙 Anneliese
Aw, this is so, so sweet 🥹❤️ Some emotions were definitely evoked here 🥹❤️ Wonderful job, Donna! ❤️
So poignant and beautiful! I love this, Donna 💕😊
Donna, this was such an emotional and heartfelt poem! It was passionate and so lovingly written, I can sense the love that blossomed into this beautifully written piece! You write words most don't dare speak, it was inspiring and courageous! I loved it! 🥰
Oh damn. Right in the heart. Well done on this Donna! I know those kinda feelings all too well with my Nonna passing. Even though we were not as close as we once were. This is beautiful.
Donna, this was superb!° Loving it!!!❤️❤️💕
Oh my gosh, this is beautiful! Old love is so often the sweetest. Loved it, Donna!
How often have I been sitting by the bedside of one with family gathered all around & this is precisely what everyone wants to communicate?
This made me feel so blissful! Your poem made me feel safe and reassured. It's like a warm cup of cocoa just hugged me. I freaking love your poem!
Stunning!! 💚💜
Breathtaking ❤️
This is just beautiful Donna. I think we all want a love like this - one that never fades. Great stuff.
This is so beautiful. Makes me think of a dear friend of mine. Her Mom recently passed. I know her parents well also. Everyday I see FB posts from her Dad re how much he loved and misses his wife. It's heartwrenching.