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Paint and Weave

Magnet Poetry - Reader's Choice

By Christy MunsonPublished about a month ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
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Paint and Weave
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Author's Notes: I rediscovered my 1980's poetry magnets box and in it were two poems I find compelling. I recall having challenged myself to create two poems using the same set of words. These two poem are what spilled out.

Which one resonates more with you, version A or B?

Leave it in Comments. I'd love to know your thoughts!

Version A

Dismantle your animal thoughts

Dance with long tender silence

Give dark grief to rugged fire

Hold down my shadow

Flow wind and rain

Electric and shallow over our hot winter hearts

I want my friend

To join me under the surface

Hear me howl

Where I paint and weave

My spiral pattern

~*~

Version B

Dance and hold me, friend

Join our silence to tender thoughts

Paint and dismantle shallow surfaces

I hear rain,

Your long-rugged shadow,

Howl under me

Down where fire spirals

Hot with my dark grief --

Flow over my electric animal heart and

Give me the wind

I want to weave my winter pattern

__________________________

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  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    I think I prefer version B more. However, I loved both of them!

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    I like B - it is poetry in motion, especially the last part.

  • Ameer Bibiabout a month ago

    Version B has a more solid flow and clear expression. It successfully conveys themes of connection, self-analysis, and evolution. The imagery is striking, and the flow of ideas goes naturally. Overall, Version B captures the heart of the message more concisely and plainly.

  • Mariann Carrollabout a month ago

    Nicely done !!!

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