Devilish smile from across the chaotic bar, towards you but not quite focused... enough to make you wonder if you are the target of my intentions tonight. Enough to give you hope.
In your direction now, for sure, I wink, I smile, and then I
Sashay, certainly to you, it seems...your heart pounds and then I
Turn aside just before I
Reach you... and greet another hopeful, lonely soul instead. You watch as I place my hand in theirs, lean in close, and tacitly offer more.
As you sigh in sinking disappointment, I peek back over my shoulder, look you up and down, smirk, and bite my lip.
Caught you looking again, or did you ever even look away? Don't lie. I know you didn't.
This will be easy, it's my favorite game and you are
Incapable of resisting.
Of course, you never even notice my friend, the forgettable one who bumped against you ever so gently while I held you in the gravity well of my eyes.
No matter, you'll figure it out when you go to close your tab after I disappear.
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Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
Work in Progress: WOWH, cozy mystery (paranormal elements)
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Clever!!! Fantastic distraction game!!! Loved it!!!
Hey Donna, great article.👋 I'm new to the Vocal life 🥺, I'm trying to learn all I can. Can you please tell me if having subscribers matter?
Donna this was beautifully done for both challenges and formats! You are quite genius in the reworking and creation of these! Nicely done!
Nicely done! I enjoyed the way you worked this out for two challenges at a go. Very creative!
Omg I love this so much. I'm not sure how I missed these! She's very slick, and so are you! ☺️❤️❤️
Realy i love your article
I dare say, saucy!
Brilliant! You had me thinking about instant attraction and the whole time you were stealing wallets
A most clever and wicked distraction indeed! Wonderful story!
woah 💖💖💖
Brilliantly done! You most certainly distracted me and surprised the heck out of me at the end 💕🙂
You...you distracted me! Omg! It worked! You distracted me with your distraction poem and performed your microheist! If that isn't brilliant, then I don't know what is! I loved this so much!
Ouch. We guys are just too easy.
Tease! ;)
So nicely written, took us for a fun ride into your criminal mind!💙Anneliese
Ha! Nicely done! She's got some smooth (criminal) moves! Love this Donna. Great stuff.
Nice crime, haha! Loved this one a lot! Great job Donna!
Oh snap...little wallet heist! This was great, lured me in and I did not see the ending coming. Wonderful entry!!
Oh, that was wonderful. Perfect heist. Well done.
Brilliant! I loved the twist ending! I guess the only thing necessary for a successful heist is the right distraction! 😆
Haha - the perfect crime! Love it!
Dear Ms. Donna - I'm so glad that I've been "Targeted" by your always 'Coffee-Stained Wit' ~ You have 'Distracted' me ~ "Hey, you Lookin' at me?" O-'D' ~ I forwarded your Lovely comment {I did not insert your name} re; "Rescue" for - Pet Haven Minnesota - and the Director loved it ! Jay Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, California 'Senior' Vocal Author - Vocal Author Community -
Ahhh, Yes, the eyes. I love where you went with this, Donna. Great entry!💖
I relished the Flow of this wonderfully written Piece❤️😉📝