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Crawl

these things

By Brenton FPublished 4 months ago β€’ 1 min read
Top Story - December 2023
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Copyright Β© Edge City Production 1984

i want to crawl into myself

put my hands around my knees

i want to sit and rock and hide awhile

find a momentary peace

i want to be absorbed

into this very skin i’m in

parts of it thick like heavy armour

and parts of it so whisper thin

i want to walk into myself

fit in snug and straitjacket tight

slip away from the good and the bad

and away from the dark and the light

i want to be in with my parts

at a level subatomique

this is where the futures are made

to the hum of a soundless shriek

i want to be a vapour

ride the air to all my pores

this is my delusion

and here i'm free from physical laws

i want to slide between my layers

i want the

IN

beyond my skin

that gap between the crack in the slack

straight to the centre of my within

social commentarysurreal poetry
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About the Creator

Brenton F

It's just a token of my extreme - Frank Zappa

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

  2. Compelling and original writing

    Creative use of language & vocab

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    Well-structured & engaging content

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    Zero grammar & spelling mistakes

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  • Tressa Rose4 months ago

    This was a great poem wow, new subscriber for sure!

  • Teresa Renton4 months ago

    Congratulations on TS! Beautiful poem. I love the way your words made me see this image of crawling into oneself. Skilfully done 😊

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    This is fantastic. Congrats on the well deserved TS.

  • Grz Colm4 months ago

    This is wicked!! Tone, pace and rhyme are just perfect!! πŸ‘πŸ‘ What is that image - it’s cool! 😁 Anyway congrats on another top story B!

  • Mariann Carroll4 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story, Well deserve πŸ‘πŸ½

  • Melissa Ingoldsby4 months ago

    This was viscerally exciting! Truly you have a unique mind

  • Kenny Penn4 months ago

    Wow!!! This is an excellent poem! Very powerful and the imagery is amazing, great job!

  • The Dani Writer4 months ago

    I WANT THAT TOOOOOOO!!! Just saying. πŸ˜‹ Excellent, and I do mean EXCELLENT poetry! You broke way past top story levels. Congratulations!

  • Poppy 4 months ago

    This is incredibly written. Simultaneously unique and relatable. Really well deserved top story!

  • Test4 months ago

    I enjoyed this immensely!

  • Phil Flannery4 months ago

    I have no words, but well done.

  • Chaia Levi4 months ago

    absolutely adore how the tenseness is conveyed through the line breaks, and the rhythm of your words reflect the real-time rhythm of unpleasant thoughts

  • K. Kocheryan4 months ago

    The flow was wonderful. Congrats

  • Congratulations!!!

  • Kendall Defoe 4 months ago

    Excellent! And I loved 'Repo Man' too!

  • Dana Crandell4 months ago

    Brilliantly written and highly relatable. Well done!

  • This was like so relatable and you've conveyed it so poetically!

  • Andrew C McDonald4 months ago

    Absolutely brilliant Brenton. We all feel that way from time to time when the world conspires to wreck our psyche. Crawl into a hole and pull a big rock in over us. Great job.

  • Hannah Moore4 months ago

    This is brilliant, well done.

  • Yes. The fliw was perfect and so playfully clever

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