The numbers...
The numbers have dropped again.
I am losing them!
*
My
exposed
heart
bled from the keys to the page.
I drained it all.
*
They came.
Friends with accolades, encouragement.
I believed.
*
Platitudes!
Pretty words,
injected
into
the
ether!
No breath wasted.
*
NO!
I felt the sincerity!
It
r
i
p
p
l
e
d.
*
Or, perhaps
I simply convinced myself -
failed myself...
*
It's ME!
I've fucked it all up,
but how?
*
Dig deeper!
I must find the right words!
They will come again
...Won't they?
***
Written for R.M. Stockson's unofficial March Madness Challenge.
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.
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Right?! And yet, here I am 12 freaking days later showing up to read and comment! (Sorry -- work has been trying to kill me, I am certain!) I think we have all experienced this feeling you describe -- more than once. You pour out your heart. You bare your soul. You put your best foot forward. And then you wait. Sometimes, they come. And sometimes, you wonder if you are doing all of this just for yourself. Dana, the reality is that your writing inspires so many of us. Even when we do not tell you in so many words. Nicely done!
Definitely feel this from time to time. Those voices can get loud! Keep up your brilliant work, friend, itβs always a pleasure to read your beautiful words! π«πβ¨
Some are just fed up with the goings on here. I am sometimes. Some are disappearing for extended time, it is up and down and can get depressing. Just bear with us and soldier on. We all feel that way sometimes. It is madness, but we got you.
Loved this poem. I think we must all have felt like this at one point or another. Don't stress. If you build it, they will come. β€οΈ
If they don't come, hunt them down and kill them. I mean, what's the point of people being alive when they don't read our stuff. It's such a waste. Instead of planting more trees, has anyone thought about eliminating humans? No? Only me? How about you Dana? You won't leave me alone in this right? Right?????
Dana, you're still one of my favs!
We're still here, Dana. The real world may throw up road blocks now & again, but we're still here. And yeah, I feel ya.
I took a little break from Vocal for personal reasons and to work on my entry for a vocal challenge. I loved this poem so much, Dana. It was so honest. Beautifully written as always. β€οΈ
It's on a downside for all of us, it seems. You're definitely not alone. Just yesterday, I submitted a piece I didn't really like (the cheezies one) because I was sick of having no reads. Lol I hear ya, my friend. This is great by the way. I love the formatting. Well done
Fantastic and loved this!!!πβ€οΈβ€οΈ
Right here, champ!
(I think those are Ted Bundyβs eyes) Iβm there with you. Sometimes being with someone in the aloneness helps
Ach...feel this so much, sir. I love the raw unfiltered honesty of this and putting your heart where you always have. I have had similar feelings...and similar feelings about not being so present on the leaderboard and for TSs. This is a powerful entry. I, know you know this, but I've never given you platitudes! :)
The love seems to wax and wane, indeed. RIde it out. Cream rises.
This was a great one that touched a nerve with the collective vocal creator hive mind. Well done
Very very nice! Loved the formatting techniques throughout, but especially for βrippledβ! I havenβt been active on Vocal long but Iβve definitely been swept up into the madness and frenzied feel of things at times. Itβs easy to say I write and share because I love it but those stats, comments, and banners hold their sway even if I pretend they donβt
I think I appear to be coming down the other side of a peak in terms of others reading my stuff too. Folk falling away. Is there a collective waning?
Damn that negative percent change on stats!! Drives me nuts. So easy to identify with this one. Well said, big bro!
LOL Feel like this daily. My stats are crap and think I'm shit but hey, write the good life, whatever the numbers say, you're a brilliant writer π€
Well done!