The Devil is in the Details

Ok…this was so well done pal! I was totally immersed in this psychotic story. Brilliantly told- to the point where I had an entire episode playing in my head throughout. Love the little funnies you put in here- apple for vitamin C 😂 like, totally gotta keep myself well while cheating and murdering. You slayed with this one…see what I did there?? 👏🏽 👏🏽 👏🏽

Brilliant storytelling! Congratulations! 🥳

This was unexpectedly dark. Like a psychological thriller in list form. Very Dexter. Well done!

How did I miss this? Grizzly!

Oh my. That was great. What a story you told. Well done.

Omg lol!! Very Hitchcockian!!! 😁 And very unique. Don’t know how you managed this but you did!!

"Dexter" meets "American Gigolo/Psycho". Well done.

This is such a chilling story told through a grocery list… just when I thought I hated listicles! Haha. I went through a gamut of emotions reading this. First I thought he was so sweet, if a bit overworked, making sure he doesn’t neglect the anniversary. Then it became clear this rich, pompous asshole was cheating… and that his own seed was gonna bloom, revealing his secret. So he committed double murder. I’m livid that he can go on with his life, his wife never knowing what a monster he is. But a lot of wealthy people can throw money at their problems, and just flee the country they’ve created chaos in, enjoying themselves until things “die” down. Well played.

That cheating piece of shit! Sorry I don't tolerate cheating. But the killing after that cheered me up! Hehehe loved your grocery list poem! 🍩🥐

Oooh twisty. This was so cleverly written. You so masterfully turned it from romance to unnerving horror. Very well done Paul.

WOW. You nailed it! I'm getting "The Fall" vibes from this (though I can only speak for the first few episodes, as I felt ill after a time, watching it...lol). SPOILERS (maybe?) Is he a serial cheater/killer? Either that, or he's been cheating for a bit and decided to kill the girlfriend. I love how nuanced the lists are, and especially, I love how the dates are vital for understanding the plot! I've read it like 4 times. Just great. I feel like donuts are his "thinking" snack, as he premeditates the next part, lol. Also, great job establishing that anniversary party, where I assume, he met the girlfriend/victim. And establishing his wealth via the amazon gift cards, all the booze, the jewelry, new smartphone, cologne, etc. He's clearly a sociopath pre-crime, but defo a psycho afterwards. "American Psycho" vibes are there as well. Clever, adding in the notes throughout, like "book in her name." Exactly the kind of thing I'd expect to read on a list, plus, it adds to his premeditation. The pregnancy test, love that detail. Was the idea that he'd frame it as a suicide, her distress over maybe being pregnant (but then why not use a gun [too loud])? I feel like the speaker's attempt to frame somebody COULD be hidden in the details; perhaps I'm missing it, but I'd love to know ;) Also, using his wife as an escape plan, that's great! He'll be out of the country before the cops find the body, eh? Amazing entry, Paul. This is gonna be tough, naming a winner! :D

Did-Was this a list planning for a murder? You're a pro at twisting romance into horror!🤣 This was a great shopping list! Not gunna lie. Burn those receipts😌

🙂🎃💚Great twist

ooo quite the twist here, great work my friend.

This tickled me! Brilliant...My favourite line,'Apple (for vitamin C)' Gotta take care of the health in stituations like this! I can really imagine this being the list of the dude from, 'You'!