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Ice
A Villanelle For The Vocal "Smooth" Challenge
The Prompt
Write a poem about something smooth.
This is an analogy for how sometimes when people are hit by misfortune, others continue with their daily lives because it hasn't happened to them, it's also inspired by the current weather in 'Nam as you can see
The music is "Under The Ice" by The Nazz
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The Ice On The Lake Smooth As Glass
'Tis An Ice Skater's Paradise
Skating Away Like Scythes Through Grass
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They Glide O'er The Smooth Ice With Class
Then The Sharp Blades Pierce Thin Smooth Ice
The Ice On The Lake Smooth As Glass
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The Ice Cracks, The Skater Aghast
The Freezing Lake Will Claim His Life
Skating Away Like Scythes Through Grass
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Freezing Water Life Fading Fast
Skaters Think The Weather Is Nice
The Ice On The Lake Smooth As Glass
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Hits The Bottom Their Life Has Passed
Frozen In A Smooth Block Of Ice
Skating Away Like Scythes Through Grass
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Life Goes On For Skaters En Masse
One Dead Blade Lost Under The Ice
The Ice On The Lake Smooth As Glass
Skating Away Like Scythes Through Grass
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Comments (11)
Really liked the way this went round and round with the repetition
Very well written!
Wow!🖤🩶🤍
This makes me think of the book "Lovely Bones".
dark but I like it
Ooo, this was wonderfully written! I loved this line, very clever use of words here, 'Skating Away Like Scythes Through Grass'. Lovely work :)
That was beautiful Mike. Although my sick mind was waiting for "the ice on the lake is smooth as glass, until the skater slips and falls on his ass." You should write it. Lol. Sorry, I'll show myself out now. 🤗
Wow,this was an incredibly well-written piece
Morbidly beautiful. The skater heading for skating heaven, a family mourns, and angel gains new wings.
Wow, this is dark but I totally see the smooth representation!
Oooo, this was so dark! I loved it!