His Haibun
and my first
He does not like poetry; I write it anyway and do not tell him. It's true his face is not a poet's face. It is round and open, youthful; too apt to be compared to the sun. His nose is neat. It is impossible to imagine him smoking a cigarette, terse, full of cheekbones and tension. His warmth burns my fingertips. I am here for his fascinating body, the haphazard freckles I touch one by one; he is here for my eyes, just my eyes. A sunbeam sneaks through the curtains and pierces us both, sizzling the spices of his skin. I inhale and wrap myself in him. He kisses my eyes.
I will lose him soon
Somewhere a clock is ticking
I hear it at night.
This is my first-ever attempt at a haibun. I only learnt about the form about an hour ago, but immediately loved it. Let me know what you think in the comments. :)
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Reading this article on haibun poetry was like taking a delightful stroll through the garden of words, intricately woven with layers of imagery and emotions. Abraham Verninac's work is a poetic masterpiece that tugs at the heartstrings while whispering sweet nothings to the soul. A true poetic maestro indeed!
Ah, "His Haibun" by TheSpinstress is like a refreshing breeze on a hot summer day - a delightful blend of poetry and prose that tickles the senses! Reading it feels like sipping a fancy cocktail of words. Cheers to TheSpinstress for crafting such a tantalizing literary concoction!
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Your first attempt or first success?! This is breathtaking. I had a feeling I was going to love it based off the photo you chose. I've never actually heard of a haibun so I had to search it up. You did fantastic! Congratulations on top story :) Never stop writing, please.
I love this! I've never heard of this format, so I had to look it up (consider me educated on this beautiful form, so thank you TheSpinstress), but you did an excellent job on your first attempt. This makes me want to go educate myself on different poetry forms.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
I absolutely love TheSpinstress's article on His Haibun! It's like diving into a pool of poetic brilliance mixed with a sprinkle of wit and charm. Reading it feels like riding a rollercoaster of emotions, with each word hitting you like a burst of confetti. Pure poetry magic at its finest!
Beautifully written haibun! The vivid imagery and emotions are deeply evocative. For a first attempt, it's truly impressive! Looking forward to more of your work, TheSpinstress!
Wow, Aymeric really hit the haibun out of the park with this one! This article is like a poetic rollercoaster - weaving words together so beautifully it's like a literary dance. I laughed, I cried, I even contemplated life's mysteries. Who knew haibun could be so riveting? Aymeric, you've got a fan in me!
Tell me more about the form!
Top story for the new attempt, congrats keep doing new and unique!!!!
I love ❤️ love love it!!!! This has such an urgency and brilliant structure. I don't usually gush. But this is gush worthy.
You have certainly peaked out interest. congratulations on your top story
Oh, the haibun, blending prose and haiku like a wonderful fusion dish! Abraham Verninac's piece is a delightful literary treat, isn't it? Reading it felt like savoring a gourmet meal for the mind, with each word a flavorful ingredient adding to the rich tapestry of emotions. A literary feast, indeed!
I laughed, I cried, I spilled my coffee reading Max's brilliant haibun on Vocal Media. His words painted vivid images in my mind, taking me on a poetic rollercoaster ride. It's like a literary masterpiece sprinkled with a dash of humor and a sprinkle of magic. Max, you've won my heart!
Congratulations 🎉. Keep up the fantastic work.
Haibun...what is that. Learning a lot here. Will check it out, wow those freckles keep popping up. So cute.
"sizzling the spices of his skin" - what a great description that is! I know nothing about haibuns. I thought it was similar to a man-bun but they are very different.
Whoa, Spinstress! This is an excellent piece! Transfixing from start to finish! Not familiar with the form so I’m going to have to do some research!!
Well done on your first attempt at a haibun! The sincerity and depth of your words shine through, thank you very much for sharing, love your works, hope to read more, subscribed.
I've heard of a Haibun before but never tried! I feel you executed it brilliantly! I loved it!
So powerful!
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I like it!! I looked up haibun and read the most famous example that they provided. 👏 good job! I might try one & thanks for sharing.😍
I like your poem, it's funny, and lovely.