Back then?
We were "us"
Life was good
Love was real
I felt warm... I was safe.
You were mine
And now?
We are "free"
Life is over
Love is dead
I feel cold... I am lost.
And you?
You are gone.
Long gone.
About the Creator
Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
Work in Progress: WOWH, cozy mystery (paranormal elements)
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This is gorgeous and I'm also here to confess I somehow wasn't subscribed to you?! I really thought I was so, sorry about that😂
Seemingly simple, but carries such weight. I'm really impressed with how well this was expressed. Those last three lines especially! ❤️
Dear Ms. Donna - I so miss you since you've been "Gone" from our little village - I've always followed you and your helpful interactions within the Vocal Community. I've stood back a little as well - I don't seem to fit into the 'Creative' Writers new way to Write - With my Respect Jay Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, California 'Senior' Vocal Author - Vocal Author Community -
Absolutely heartbreaking. You managed to well up an ocean of emotions here! Beautiful job absolutely conquering the restrictions of the challenge!
I shall not mumble and steal everything everyone said below because, they are all right! I will just say this, damn you again for getting me in the feels, Donna! Exceptional work!
Oh this grabbed me. Immediately took me back to every break up I ever had
Donna, this was such a heart breaking poem about love and the loss of it! It felt emotional and gripping in such a melancholic way. Breath taking and relatable! So well written, Donna! 💜
So sad, and yet so beautiful.
This evokes such pain. "And now? We are 'free'" I caught that sarcasm. Well done!
I am lost. You are gone. Long gone. 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 You wrote the words of my heart! I deeply resonated with your poem!
Heartbreaking love poem!!! Hugs & hearts!!!❤️❤️💕
Definitely felt this one. Great work Donna.
Ouch. Love hurts.
Bitter sweet, love it 😊😊
OH, so sad and poignantly written 💙Anneliese
Well done, so sad but beautifully written.
Great poem Donna. I guess that's just part of going through life
People come and go!! Great poem!
That hurt to my toes