Force And Feeling
An elemental quadru-haiku
Devastating force,
Gentle current, swell and swirl,
The blood of all life.
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Devastating force,
Gentle warmth, flicker and flame,
Heat, passion, power.
🔥
Devastating force,
Gentle breeze, blustering gale,
Breathe, sleep, think, relax.
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Devastating force,
Gentle growth, shaper of tools,
Hammer and nail.
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Gary Ragnarsson
Deep thinker, stoic, and writer from the UK, sharing everything from philosophical insights to my most intimate, personal stories.
In a world consumed by chasing more, I’m over here embracing less on purpose.
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Comments (7)
This was so cleverly executed! The repetition, the pros and cons, and your choice of words! Just brilliant!
This is beautiful and powerful. I love how you repeated the first line in all four haikus, it definitely gave it a very connected feeling. Well done!
Really great!! Reminders in nuance,the repetition of the line,perfect.
I like how you were able to carry the repetition of line 1 through all the haikus and similar formatting of line structure to highlight the similarities and differences of these 4 elements.
Excellent words
I loved how you brought out the best and worst of each elemental force. Nicely penned :)
Very nicely done.