This was written for a Vocal + Assist facebook group prompt from Rick Henry: write a 60-80 word poem about bananas
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One foot on a banana peel
And one foot in the grave,
I wish I could go back in time,
There are days that I would save.
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If only I wasn't rotting mush
Wasting in my skin,
My yellow has all turned to brown
Dark spots are setting in.
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I still remember days gone past
When my flesh was young and firm,
Before time stole my youthfulness,
All that remains is withered fruit for worms.
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Comments (12)
How did you manage to create something so beautiful with the prompt being of bananas?
I'm speechless. LOVE this one!
Wow, this was gloriously beautiful, grim, elegant, and honest all at the same time. Lots of emotions here. Wonderful job!! Thank you for sharing this!
Fun read!!! The rhyming is fantastic & love it!!!
Disturbing, but in a good way!
Excellent! I do now feel like a banana literally!
Super beautiful!
Awww, that was so sad but very true about the inevitable changes that comes with age. Very well written!
This was really good. You made a meaningful state in using very few words. Great job!!!
Good poem 🍌. A good take on the prompt.
Love your take on the challenge! Very original.
Wow. Love the aging metaphor. Really well done.