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Festering Fruit

by Heather Hubler 22 days ago in sad poetry
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no more ripe banana

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This was written for a Vocal + Assist facebook group prompt from Rick Henry: write a 60-80 word poem about bananas

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One foot on a banana peel

And one foot in the grave,

I wish I could go back in time,

There are days that I would save.

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If only I wasn't rotting mush

Wasting in my skin,

My yellow has all turned to brown

Dark spots are setting in.

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I still remember days gone past

When my flesh was young and firm,

Before time stole my youthfulness,

All that remains is withered fruit for worms.

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Thank you for reading! And thank you to Rick for the fun challenge!

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About the author

Heather Hubler

Coffee/reading/writing/family–my favorite things in life. I have a degree in biochemistry but my split personality loves creative writing just as much!

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  • Veronica Coldiron14 days ago

    I'm speechless. LOVE this one!

  • Gina C.16 days ago

    Wow, this was gloriously beautiful, grim, elegant, and honest all at the same time. Lots of emotions here. Wonderful job!! Thank you for sharing this!

  • Babs Iverson19 days ago

    Fun read!!! The rhyming is fantastic & love it!!!

  • C. H. Richard20 days ago

    Excellent! I do now feel like a banana literally!

  • Subhi Najar20 days ago

    Super beautiful!

  • Awww, that was so sad but very true about the inevitable changes that comes with age. Very well written!

  • Rick Henry22 days ago

    This was really good. You made a meaningful state in using very few words. Great job!!!

  • Keila Aartila22 days ago

    Good poem 🍌. A good take on the prompt.

  • Dawn Salois22 days ago

    Love your take on the challenge! Very original.

  • Cathy holmes22 days ago

    Wow. Love the aging metaphor. Really well done.

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