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Erubescence

A Limerick Poem

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 5 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - October 2023
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Rayna was obsessed with the colour Red

Tristan badly wanted to lock her in wed

He took a knife to his heart

She stopped to admire the art

He asked "Would you love me if I was dead?"

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Author's Notes:

This Limerick was written for:

A limerick is a humorous five-line poem with just one stanza. Limericks have an AABBA rhyme scheme and a bouncy rhythm. The subject matter of a limerick is often whimsical and funny.

Limericks all follow the same structure and pattern which sets them apart from other poetic forms and makes them easily identifiable.

  • A limerick consists of five lines arranged in one stanza.
  • The first, second and fifth lines must rhyme and have 7 to 10 syllables.
  • The third and fourth lines must rhyme and only have 5 to 7 syllables.
  • The rhythm of a limerick is anapestic, which means two unstressed syllables are followed by a third stressed syllable.
  • The first, second, and final line each have three anapests—da dum da da dum da da dum.
  • The third and fourth lines have two anapests-—da dum da da dum.
Definition from dictionary.com

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • Udam Pradhan5 days ago

    Very Nice

  • Salomé Saffiri18 days ago

    I enjoy how eloquently you described toxic passion!!

  • Sarah Danaher21 days ago

    Good poem, he was truly desperate.

  • Stephanie Hoogstad2 months ago

    What a heart-stopping poem—literally! I’ve never seen such a dark limerick before, and I absolutely love it. I also love that you taught me a new word.

  • What a great little ditty to capture an essence of erubesence. Plus, I got to learn a new word!

  • Ali SP3 months ago

    I can see why this was a top story. Congratulations!! I love your play on words and the tone of this poem. Well done!

  • noor3 months ago

    well done friend!

  • Malky McEwan3 months ago

    Unusual and I like it.

  • NJ3 months ago

    well-written, enjoyed reading!

  • Isabella Rose3 months ago

    I appreciate the dark tone of this. Why did it make me giggle? LOL.

  • C. H. Richard3 months ago

    A bit of horror cut in to your lovely limerick- lol. 😊❤️

  • Daphsam3 months ago

    Congratulations on top story, very cleverly written! 

  • Cindy Calder4 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story with this piece. It was an awesome limerick!

  • Atlantica4 months ago

    great 💙 Let's interact with each other

  • Justine Crowley4 months ago

    That is wild and wonderful. A wild, wonderful, and engaging limerick indeed. Well done. Your Top Story record is super impressive.

  • E.K. Daniels4 months ago

    Dark and deep—nice!

  • Raymond G. Taylor4 months ago

    Wicked and wonderful Limerick and thanks for the helpful explanation of the rhyme scheme. Congrats on the TS

  • Donna Fox (HKB)4 months ago

    Brings to mind that saying, "you don't know what you have until it's gone"... maybe she did love him more dead?? LOL

  • Jenna Sedi4 months ago

    This is amazing! I also really appreciate that you include all the authors notes so allow everyone to fully grasp the nuances in your writing regardless of our familiarity.

  • Denise Larkin4 months ago

    A dark, wonderful limerick. Powerful and deep. Loved it so much. You are a wonderful writer.

  • Margaret Brennan4 months ago

    ironic how art can mimic life. my son had a best friend, Mike. One night around midnight, he called his mother and asked her come quickly and take care of the baby. it was a very odd request so his mother called the police. as soon as the police arrived, they heard a gun shot. . . . . Mike's wife said she wanted a divorce. he shot her, then as soon as the police arrived, shot himself. he called his mother only to be sure his baby son would be in good hands.... you just never know what drives people. GREAT story and congratulations on top story status.

  • Wow how great was this! Love your dark side of writing

  • Arslan5 months ago

    Very nice Glad to read it

  • Amelia Moore5 months ago

    heh. dark but adorable. nice!

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