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Don't

An Inverse entry

By The Invisible WriterPublished 2 months ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
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Don't
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I love you more than anything

Sometimes I forget, maybe you do too, but

Those words don't have any meaning

How many lines do we have to cross, before we say

Don't hold me, when I cry out for you

Don't call my name, when I need to find you

Words were never ghosts, until I heard you say

Every time I feel your touch pressed against me

I get lost in the whirlwind of what could be

Your deep blue eyes look at me, and I have to say

All the lakes we swam together in have frozen

All the leaves we covered our branches with have fallen

How can we face the truth, if you keep promising

We built homes inside each other's hearts

We buried ourselves inside each other's souls

If thoughts were ink, tattoed on my body, they would say

Our words bled from a thousand cuts, we sliced into our skin

Our puzzle doesn't fit anymore, our pieces are too broken

Love is supposed to be honest, you can't keep pretending

We could write a different ending

Our story won't change, no matter how much you wish

Peter loved Wendy, the way Cinderella loved Charming

The way

I love you more than anything

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The Invisible Writer

"Poetry is what happens when nothing else can"

Charles Bukowski

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  • L.C. Schäferabout a month ago

    "We buried ourselves inside each other's souls" - what a line though

  • Wowza...you hit me right in the face with this one. Fantastic job

  • Jay Kantor2 months ago

    Hi-i - You so often seem to pop out memories within me - Whew ~ This was a Biggie. You are an incredible talent as a creative-communicator. Best to you, j.in.la.

  • Teresa Renton2 months ago

    Such evocative lines! I also loved the ink line 🥰

  • Leslie Writes2 months ago

    Ooh this is so nuanced. Love is so fickle. Wonderful piece!

  • This works so perfectly inasmuch as most relationships involve some ebb & flow where reading down or reading up seems more appropriate depending upon the time & situation. Beautifully crafted, Invisi.

  • Our story won't change, no matter how much you wish Peter loved Wendy, the way Cinderella loved Charming These lines hit me so hard because I always wished Peter loved Wendy. It also reminded me of Taylor Swift's song, Cardigan. In that song, there's these lines: Tried to change the ending Peter losing Wendy I'm so sorry, I'm rambling at this point. Your poem worked so well both ways and you nailed this challenge!

  • Hannah Moore2 months ago

    Well done, these are tricky!

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Brilliant & beautiful!!! Loved it!!!💕♥️♥️

  • Tiffany Gordon 2 months ago

    Lovely writing IW!

  • Shirley Belk2 months ago

    Great poem! Life happens that way...sad.

  • Ashley Shiflett2 months ago

    What a bittersweet poem. It was very well written. Loved it!

  • Novel Allen2 months ago

    I must say lakes are freezing all over the place. If you elabrated a bit more this would make a great entry for the other challenge on love, ugh. Relatable and honest in every way.

  • Caroline Jane2 months ago

    All the lakes we swam together in have frozen.. what a great line!! Gorgeous.

  • This is absolutely gorgeous poetry. Every line hits harder than the last but this one, "If thoughts were ink, tattoed on my body, they would be saying / Our words bled from a thousand cuts" really got me.

  • Rachel Deeming2 months ago

    Great inverse!

  • Lindsay Sfara2 months ago

    Wow, what stunning poetry. This is so well-written, and I love the imagery behind your use of language. Nicely done!

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    Heartwrenching and beautiful at the same time. Well done.

  • ROCK 2 months ago

    "We built homes inside each other's hearts" ~ poignant yet sad. A very beautiful piece.

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