Demetri was a dream of mine--a dream designed (I think) and conjured by my soul...
In Ecuador, that summer when I ran away to find the part of me that wasn't thriving--to fix it up and make it whole.
Set amid the canopies of palm trees and the jungle’s balmy hold…
Tumbling fantasies enchanted me and into fairytales, I stumbled (and) mistook his romances for gold.
"Run away with me", (he said to me) "and you will see together we'll acquire
A kingdom--a new business--we shall build a grand empire." Oh...
Captivated by a man I thought to be an angel ✨sent to save me✨ from the waves of my depression, I turned over all my savings to construct an abstract form of heaven--though...Demetri (oh) Demetri, (he was like a reverie)...I was stuck inside a daydream and
The hands of time would show that all he'd done was lovebomb me. Demetri (oh) Demetri, (he was lovely for awhile)...and
I was like a little puppy, falling to his wit and charming smile. Every part of me above the world and soaring high...(never wondering what the fall'd be like...), once bethroned up
On cloud nine...
Never questioning his motives--I was just a foolish girl without much focus; he enchanted me and danced with me but was really just the Devil in disguise. Demetri (oh) Demetri was a dream, you see, of mine... I awoke from my distraction (I) was broke without a fraction (I) should have seen it coming, (I)... should have probably been more wise. 💔
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-Gina C. 🧚♀️✨
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Author's Note: This may or may not be a true story. 🥲
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This poem was written for the Dancing with Distraction Challenge. :)
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Gina C.
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Comments (24)
Enchanting. This possibly true story reminds me of the epic Spanish series on Prime. The Time In Between. You could have played the lead. Wonderful poem Gina.😀 Makes me want to possibly hunt Mr D down and educate him. 🤣
Wonderful story through poetry, and meets the description of the challenge well. Great job 👏
This is a beautiful (and sad) story. Very well done. (I hope this doesn’t rub the wrong way because, for me, it is a beautiful compliment): this story channels elements of Taylor Swift in the best way and I LOVE it! Thanks for sharing!
It happens to the best of us. There are some predators out there that prey on the beaten and the bruised, knowing that they are easier to manipulate and deceive in their vulnerable, broken state. Well done, Gina.
Stupid damn Demetris of the world!! You painted that picture all too clearly. Beautiful work, but hugs for the maybe true portion, my friend :)
Wow. Gina I promised I’d make it here. I haven’t even attempted this Dancing with Distracting Challenge. This piece spoke to me is so many ways. You know I’ve tried to pick a line here or there to include but I can’t. This poem of yours is such a complete unit that it seems wrong to even try. Love the typography design layout for this piece … embedded distraction in a way yet core to the concept. I only recently heard the word love bombing in the whirl wind beginning of a relationship. ‘Love bombing! Beware.’ Yet the trap. How can you pick the Devil in disguise when you’re broken? I experience Depression (I’m in an episode now) as part of my mental illness and I deeply feel the dream offered. When we’re vulnerable you can see in hindsight with insight … they choose you. A wonderful poem. Good luck in the Challenge!! Pauline 🌸
Never wondering what the fall would be like. This line punched me in the gut so hard. I fell so hard every single time because those guys brought me soaring so high up on cloud nine. The higher we are, the harder we fall. And trust me, we always fall. Your acrostic was just so relatable! All the lovebombing, the Devil disguised as an Angel, me never questioning his motives. If this indeed is a true story, I'm so sorry this happened to you as well my sweet Red Partner. Sending you lots of love and hugs! 🥺❤️
This is tragically beautiful. Well done, my friend.
I think this is beautiful. If I may, I think the additions of punctuation and bolding and such has taken away from the story, I see that it gives the story 'texture' but I think it can hold its own without the embellishments.
Snap! I think that kind of one-sided relationship has happened to all of us. But I highly doubt many would be able to describe it as well as you do in your poem. Powerful!
Yeahhh... something about this kind of power and clarity makes it 'may not be' a true story feel like a bit of a longshot ;) Amazing work, Gina. And though I'm sorry for the heartbreak you (may have) had to experience, your tone sounds powerful, learned, and triumphant in ways. Hoping I'm tuning into something true there, and that this turned into a valuable experience you used as an opportunity for growth and expansion. 💙 (Not to mention... it really was fun while it lasted, wasn't it? 😉)
Oooof. Scammed. Awesome work, Gina!
Your words move me. Another exceptional poem. The acrostic is your medium!
Loved this one! You captured the emotion and heartbreak so well. Why, oh why, must there be so many Demetri's in this world??
True or not … it’s a winner. 👏🏼
Amazing, Gina! ❤️
Very touching and emotional and raw and powerful! Extremely well expressed. I can feel the hurt.
😩😩😩. Does he have like 10 brothers or something? cause I think a bunch of us know him too…. 👏👏👏❤️ awesome work, Gina!
Wonderful creativity 💖📝💯❗
Fabulous creation. I also knew Demetri
Wonderfully-spun heartache. Love it.
This so incredible! And (sadly) relatable. But I love it! 💕
Damn Gina, this is awesome. So creative. Another story within a poem! Loved it! Well done, friend! It is a sad story too and Demitri sounds like a douche!
My God, you are so good at this. You never disappoint and your words always move me.Excellent work.