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Amid Confetti Fire

An acrostic poem

By Gina C.Published 4 months ago • Updated 4 months ago • 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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Daisy whispers that it's over as we watch the fragments fall

Into confetti fire...and I pretend for her that I'm not frightened; that I'm not terrified at all.

"Shh," I say and pull her closer, "Daisylynn, do you recall

The rain upon our windows and the Petrichor of Fall? When we would forage four-leaf clovers,

Reminiscing of our springs spent in Nepal?"

(And as confetti fire blossoms all around us)...as we dissipate into the dust that's shed from a r m a g e d d o n 's ball,

Catastrope surrounds me, and

The pieces of our heaven become one ginormous, crumbled-wall.

(I do my best to distract Daisy)--to keep her well-enthralled; I hum

On beat to Humpty Dumpty--"Do you remember, pretty Daisy, the way he tumbled down and had a fall?" (And as she starts to sing to me about the helpless Kingdom...)

Nostalgia dries our tired tears to salt; (then we cease amid confetti fire)--✨and to final sleep, we waltz✨. 💔

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-Gina C.🧚‍♀️✨

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This poem was written for the Dancing with Distraction Challenge. :)

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Gina C.

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Free-Form poet of ethereal style. 🧚‍♀️✨

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A sucker for a good rhyme. ☺️

Fueled by a conflicted soul of fire & water. ❤️‍🔥🧜🏻‍♀️

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  • MT Poetry4 months ago

    Great poetry!!!🥰 Poignant depiction of a bittersweet farewell, beautifully capturing the fragility of the moment and the tenderness between the speaker and Daisy.🙌👏

  • Aryan Kumar4 months ago

    ✅️ Great Share ❤️, Thanks👍🤗 ❤️🔥

  • Hessam Shaikh4 months ago

    Loved it!

  • Very good, nice image of the article

  • Kristen Balyeat4 months ago

    OH MY WORD- Gina, this brought tears to my eyes as I imagined myself in this exact position with my two boys. What a beautiful story of a mother's protection, gentleness and fierce love. The entire story was captivating and held my heart with each word. Beautifully done! Seriously! This is incredible!

  • Gary Ragnarsson4 months ago

    This is actually beautiful. Honestly, a genuine delight to read, and I’m more than inspired by it ❤️

  • Amjad Ateih Dib4 months ago

    it is really good one

  • Yayyyyyy congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Novel Allen4 months ago

    Stunningly wonderful. Beautifully worded. Marilena is your other distraction.

  • Andrew C McDonald4 months ago

    The imagery and emotion drip off the page like confetti fire from a party disaster. Fantastic work.

  • Brenton F4 months ago

    So beautiful and heartbreaking all in one! You have excelled yourself here and so definitely worthy of a top story place!

  • Loryne Andawey4 months ago

    Oh that is heartwrenchingly beautiful. It reminds me of that scene in the Titanic when the mother lulls her children to sleep with a bedtime story, knowing full well what will happen soon. Well deserved Top Story.

  • Mackenzie Davis4 months ago

    Stunning. This has beautiful rhythm, reads like a song. Just gorgeous. Well done, as always! 💕

  • Ahna Lewis4 months ago

    Ahh, this was so sad and so beautiful! Congrats on your Top Story, Gina!

  • Real Poetic4 months ago

    Congrats! 🎉

  • Nelson Chukwudike4 months ago

    Good image .. nothing can compare to love of a mother to the children.....

  • Melissa Ingoldsby4 months ago

    Congratulations on your astonishing and thoughtful top story you’ll win or I’ll eat my hat! Though I think I need to buy a hat first lol

  • AGB4 months ago

    God this one got me good!! :') Congrats on your TS

  • Judey Kalchik 4 months ago

    Yay! Well deserved recognition if this marvel!

  • Heather Hubler4 months ago

    YAY! So glad you got Top Story!!

  • Cindy Calder4 months ago

    Wow, you packed a great deal into a little poem. It was like reading a novella. Job well done!

  • sleepy drafts4 months ago

    YES! I am so glad to see this as TS! ❤️ Congratulations!!

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    And, there it is. Congrats on the TS, you beautiful genius.

  • Aphotic4 months ago

    Wow. The imagery in this is so beautiful yet harrowing. I love that you made it into a story, a mother trying to distract her child from the destruction around them and their inevitable end. You’re a brilliant storyteller and poet. Love this.

  • sleepy drafts4 months ago

    Beautifully done and incredibly thought-provoking. ❤️ I love the storytelling in this poem!

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