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Cellphone zombies

A True Crime/Dark story/Dark Poetry Facebook entry

By Novel AllenPublished 7 days ago โ€ข 1 min read
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"You are all allowing the phone obsession to turn you into zombies", my mother yelled at me as I walked out the door, my eyes glued to the screen.

"Awww! Mom. Don't be so dramatic". I replied rather absently.

Should i not have listened

When mother said, "look before you cross the road"

well, i did look

but then my eyes returned to the 'Smartphone screen'

i kept walking, long after all the sensible people

stood safely upon the sidewalk

My question is "If this damned phone is so 'smart', why

did it not warn me about the rather large S..U..V

barreling towards me at breakneck speed

Ok, so the sign clearly read:

The conversation was so spicy

dishing dirt on an innocent soul

it could very well have waited

till i arrived at the mall

Screech.. screech..scrunchhhh..screechhhhhhhh!

"get out the road you f...ing idiot"

Thuddddd...blinding lights of shooting pain

then nothing

Too late...i felt the full impact of the 5 megaton rock

the SUV well could have been a meteor hurtled from above

My body flew high into the sky

fell to earth with bone creaking, crunching snaps

my arms were twisted to the sides

my legs shattered in fifteen places

my skull cracked in four places

my eyes were blinded by the goo and blood

oozing from my head

i could not feel my body

i could not move

Doctors said I had haemorrhage on the inside

why I am alive is a true miracle

everybody said so

i will heal with time

but i will never be the same

Six months later, I looked like this:

Learn from my mistake

Don't be a smartphone zombie!!!!!

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About the Creator

Novel Allen

(Uk based)... Listen to all, but follow no one absolutely!!!... Be a mountain, a stream, a river, a dream. Exist within moments, be driven by whims and fancies, be free spirited. Untamable. Run wild with the wind!

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  • Tabish Malika day ago

    Very good poem

  • Real Poetic3 days ago

    I absolutely love this. So true. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

  • Donna Fox3 days ago

    Novel, this was so engaging and intense! It was well written and had a great flow to it! I love the way you went with this idea, so gruesome and awful but in a creative way! Glad he survived and learned his lesson, but kind of disappointed he didn't pay the ultimate price for not listening to his mother! ๐Ÿ˜œ Also, saw this was Top Story the other day, so a belated congratulations are in order! ๐ŸŽ‰๐Ÿ’œ

  • RM Stockton5 days ago

    Great story, and so relatable! I had a cellphone zombie walk out right in front of my car just yesterday! Well done!

  • Grz Colm5 days ago

    Oy! U over there! Congrats on your top story! ๐Ÿ˜

  • Tiffany Gordon 5 days ago

    Awesome work! Very clever!

  • Gerald Holmes6 days ago

    Great writing and message. Well done and congrats on the top story.

  • Wow! Congratulations Novel!! I love to watch them anywhere and everywhere but especially when gathered in purposeful masses. Like โ€˜cellphone peak hourโ€™ down the Queen Street Mall in Brisbane. They walk with long strides heading towards Central Station in the City for the outbound trains home. In fact I used to bravely stand at risk facing them in the midst and video them. Until โ€ฆ a cellphone zombie unbeknown to me was navigating the walk across the Mall and crashed into me. Result? Phone dropped and screen smashed. Yet the cellphone zombie continued seemingly unaware. Thank you again for a great reading experience Pauline ๐ŸŒธ

  • Lol, this was awesomeeee! It had humour and also a very powerful message! You did such an amazing job on this! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Babs Iverson7 days ago

    Awesome!!! Loving it!!! Congratulations on T S too!!!๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’•

  • Dylan 7 days ago

    This is all too real in today's society, too many smart phone zombies! Well done!

  • Very good warning! We all act like this I think lol but itโ€™s not a laughing matterโ€ฆ๐Ÿ˜ข congratulations on top story!

  • Mariann Carroll7 days ago

    Congratulations , thanks so much for entering it in the Zombie phone Challenge ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿฅฐ

  • QuillQuest7 days ago

    NIceeee .

  • Kendall Defoe7 days ago

    Well, this is something I can relate to. I have seen people walk through intersections without looking up from their phones, and I have a warning on my page about them. Great TS, Ms. Allen!

  • Dana Crandell7 days ago

    Great challenge entry! Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Clever. Great job ๐Ÿ‘ congrats

  • Lamar Wiggins7 days ago

    That was great! and a powerful lesson on how not to become a victim of The Cell Phone Zombie. ๐Ÿ’–

  • Jay Kantor7 days ago

    Dear 'N' ~ So glad I've discovered your blog/with such lovely dropdowns. *I've subscribed to you; with pleasure. Although we all have our 'Cell Rants' I've written "Brain Freeze" with the same 'Vigor' ~ Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, California 'Senior' Vocal Author - Vocal Author Community -

  • Paul Stewart7 days ago

    Lol...I will admit to laughing a lot at this. And this has just enough realism in it to make it kinda frightening! Congrats on Top Story!

  • Brenton F7 days ago

    I laughed I shouldn't have but I did. The truth is stranger...

  • Cathy holmes7 days ago

    This is great, and all too possible. Congrats on the TS

  • Fahad7 days ago

    https://vocal.media/fiction/movie-review-john-wick-4

  • Congratulations on your Top Story ๐Ÿ’ฏ

  • Noor Chaudhary7 days ago

    Wellโ€ฆ..great work and you are spitting facts .

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