Cellphone zombies
A True Crime/Dark story/Dark Poetry Facebook entry
"You are all allowing the phone obsession to turn you into zombies", my mother yelled at me as I walked out the door, my eyes glued to the screen.
"Awww! Mom. Don't be so dramatic". I replied rather absently.
Should i not have listened
When mother said, "look before you cross the road"
well, i did look
but then my eyes returned to the 'Smartphone screen'
i kept walking, long after all the sensible people
stood safely upon the sidewalk
My question is "If this damned phone is so 'smart', why
did it not warn me about the rather large S..U..V
barreling towards me at breakneck speed
Ok, so the sign clearly read:
The conversation was so spicy
dishing dirt on an innocent soul
it could very well have waited
till i arrived at the mall
Screech.. screech..scrunchhhh..screechhhhhhhh!
"get out the road you f...ing idiot"
Thuddddd...blinding lights of shooting pain
then nothing
Too late...i felt the full impact of the 5 megaton rock
the SUV well could have been a meteor hurtled from above
My body flew high into the sky
fell to earth with bone creaking, crunching snaps
my arms were twisted to the sides
my legs shattered in fifteen places
my skull cracked in four places
my eyes were blinded by the goo and blood
oozing from my head
i could not feel my body
i could not move
Doctors said I had haemorrhage on the inside
why I am alive is a true miracle
everybody said so
i will heal with time
but i will never be the same
Six months later, I looked like this:
Learn from my mistake
Don't be a smartphone zombie!!!!!
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Novel Allen
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Comments (32)
Wow. Such a great story, with an important lesson.
It is so interesting the way this poem entertains as well as educates the readers. Absolute masterpiece!
I absolutely love this. So true. ππΌ
Novel, this was so engaging and intense! It was well written and had a great flow to it! I love the way you went with this idea, so gruesome and awful but in a creative way! Glad he survived and learned his lesson, but kind of disappointed he didn't pay the ultimate price for not listening to his mother! π Also, saw this was Top Story the other day, so a belated congratulations are in order! ππ
Great story, and so relatable! I had a cellphone zombie walk out right in front of my car just yesterday! Well done!
Oy! U over there! Congrats on your top story! π
Awesome work! Very clever!
Great writing and message. Well done and congrats on the top story.
Wow! Congratulations Novel!! I love to watch them anywhere and everywhere but especially when gathered in purposeful masses. Like βcellphone peak hourβ down the Queen Street Mall in Brisbane. They walk with long strides heading towards Central Station in the City for the outbound trains home. In fact I used to bravely stand at risk facing them in the midst and video them. Until β¦ a cellphone zombie unbeknown to me was navigating the walk across the Mall and crashed into me. Result? Phone dropped and screen smashed. Yet the cellphone zombie continued seemingly unaware. Thank you again for a great reading experience Pauline πΈ
Lol, this was awesomeeee! It had humour and also a very powerful message! You did such an amazing job on this! Congratulations on your Top Story!
Awesome!!! Loving it!!! Congratulations on T S too!!!πππ
This is all too real in today's society, too many smart phone zombies! Well done!
Very good warning! We all act like this I think lol but itβs not a laughing matterβ¦π’ congratulations on top story!
Congratulations , thanks so much for entering it in the Zombie phone Challenge π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°
NIceeee .
Well, this is something I can relate to. I have seen people walk through intersections without looking up from their phones, and I have a warning on my page about them. Great TS, Ms. Allen!
Great challenge entry! Congratulations on Top Story!
Clever. Great job π congrats
That was great! and a powerful lesson on how not to become a victim of The Cell Phone Zombie. π
Dear 'N' ~ So glad I've discovered your blog/with such lovely dropdowns. *I've subscribed to you; with pleasure. Although we all have our 'Cell Rants' I've written "Brain Freeze" with the same 'Vigor' ~ Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, California 'Senior' Vocal Author - Vocal Author Community -
Lol...I will admit to laughing a lot at this. And this has just enough realism in it to make it kinda frightening! Congrats on Top Story!
I laughed I shouldn't have but I did. The truth is stranger...
This is great, and all too possible. Congrats on the TS
Congratulations on your Top Story π―
Wellβ¦..great work and you are spitting facts .