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A Farewell to Hair

For Paul's Unofficial Remix Challenge

By Dana CrandellPublished about a month ago β€’ Updated about a month ago β€’ 1 min read
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The hair I had has up and left

Replaced by a smooth, slick surface

With dings, dents and bumps.

The hats I wore for fashion

Now prevent sunburn, mostly.

Those who say bald is beautiful

Have never looked under the hats.

Farewell, thick, blond mop

With that flamboyant flip -

Unruly, uncontrollable

And now so missed.

Only the stubborn sides remain,

Leaving an airstrip for the mosquitoes.

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A quick, near-last-minute entry to my pal-across-the-pond, Paul's unique challenge, which I'll link to below. It was inspired, in title, at least, by this one from Paul:

For any of you talented, quick thinkers that would like to enter, here's the challenge:

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About the Creator

Dana Crandell

Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.

Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.

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  • Grz Colm7 days ago

    Missed this one! Great entry Dana!! 😁

  • Very cute remix! Liked: β€˜ The hair I had has up and left…’ (you need to appreciate & show respect to the hair that stuck around for the long haul!πŸ˜³πŸ€£β€¦ my husband sported a red Afro, back in the day (before my time)… his has thinned considerably πŸ˜΅β€πŸ’«β€¦ saves on time & money!βœ… β€˜ Farewell, thick, blond mop With that flamboyant flip - Unruly, uncontrollable’… sounds similar situation.😊

  • Flamance @ lit.about a month ago

    Awesome story I like it congratulations πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‰

  • Novel Allenabout a month ago

    Hey, come on. Bald heads are sexy. Just get rid of the side stuff and strut your bald stuff. Make it shiny. The gals will love it. I dare you to try it. Takes off 10 years.

  • Shirley Belkabout a month ago

    This was so funny. Reminded me of my brother's hair (or lack thereof...)

  • Jay Kantorabout a month ago

    d-bud - Odd how my HairBrush~FilledUp for years..it Won..! j-bud

  • Tina D'Angeloabout a month ago

    I have to share this with my hubby, who hair has been receding since he was 20!

  • Esala Gunathilakeabout a month ago

    Ha ha ha. It made me "your idea is wonderful"

  • Paul Stewartabout a month ago

    PMSL! lol...I had a feeling it was going to go one of two ways with you sir - either a deep piece or a deep piece with lashings of humour thrown in. What a fun take on the original piece! Also, you're looking smart in the pic anyway, hair or not! this was just pure Crandell brilliant. You always have a way of making me laugh with your phrase choices. I can imagine you actually reading it to me...and I'd not be able to keep a straight face lol! Yay for getting one in on time, so pleased! Was waiting and looking and hoping, haha! Thank you for giving your time and creativity to the challenge. As ever, I've been bowled over by the response and you've just made my job even harder lol! So, thanks for that, bud! arse. :P

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Hahahahahahahhahaha that last line made me laugh so much! Loved your take on the challenge!

  • JBazabout a month ago

    'slick surface With dings, dents and bumps.' How long were you holding this little beauty inside, waiting to fallout of your mind like the golden locks of old. Funny, funny.

  • Brin J.about a month ago

    "Leaving an airstrip for the mosquitos" 🀣 I adore your humor on this. I smiled from start to finish.

  • Mark Gagnonabout a month ago

    My brother is the one with the disappearing hairline. I tell him it's because he was swimming in the wrong end of the gene pool.

  • Heather Hublerabout a month ago

    The title got me...what an ode, lol!! Great entry, big bro!! Loved the humor :)

  • Judey Kalchik about a month ago

    Airstrip for 🦟!!!

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