A Farewell to Hair
For Paul's Unofficial Remix Challenge
The hair I had has up and left
Replaced by a smooth, slick surface
With dings, dents and bumps.
The hats I wore for fashion
Now prevent sunburn, mostly.
Those who say bald is beautiful
Have never looked under the hats.
Farewell, thick, blond mop
With that flamboyant flip -
Unruly, uncontrollable
And now so missed.
Only the stubborn sides remain,
Leaving an airstrip for the mosquitoes.
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A quick, near-last-minute entry to my pal-across-the-pond, Paul's unique challenge, which I'll link to below. It was inspired, in title, at least, by this one from Paul:
For any of you talented, quick thinkers that would like to enter, here's the challenge:
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.
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Awesome story I like it congratulations 🎉🎉
Hey, come on. Bald heads are sexy. Just get rid of the side stuff and strut your bald stuff. Make it shiny. The gals will love it. I dare you to try it. Takes off 10 years.
This was so funny. Reminded me of my brother's hair (or lack thereof...)
d-bud - Odd how my HairBrush~FilledUp for years..it Won..! j-bud
I have to share this with my hubby, who hair has been receding since he was 20!
Ha ha ha. It made me "your idea is wonderful"
PMSL! lol...I had a feeling it was going to go one of two ways with you sir - either a deep piece or a deep piece with lashings of humour thrown in. What a fun take on the original piece! Also, you're looking smart in the pic anyway, hair or not! this was just pure Crandell brilliant. You always have a way of making me laugh with your phrase choices. I can imagine you actually reading it to me...and I'd not be able to keep a straight face lol! Yay for getting one in on time, so pleased! Was waiting and looking and hoping, haha! Thank you for giving your time and creativity to the challenge. As ever, I've been bowled over by the response and you've just made my job even harder lol! So, thanks for that, bud! arse. :P
Hahahahahahahhahaha that last line made me laugh so much! Loved your take on the challenge!
'slick surface With dings, dents and bumps.' How long were you holding this little beauty inside, waiting to fallout of your mind like the golden locks of old. Funny, funny.
"Leaving an airstrip for the mosquitos" 🤣 I adore your humor on this. I smiled from start to finish.
My brother is the one with the disappearing hairline. I tell him it's because he was swimming in the wrong end of the gene pool.
The title got me...what an ode, lol!! Great entry, big bro!! Loved the humor :)
Airstrip for 🦟!!!