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a familiar tune

careful what you take in

By Zara BlumePublished 6 months ago Updated 6 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - October 2023
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a familiar tune
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history repeats itself

victors lie to victimize

a most haunting melody

and trite, lyrical poison

intoxicatingly sung

deathly china white in veins

the room (or my head) spun round

my life a broken record

caught on familiar scratches

‘til i remove the needle

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Chloe Rose Violet’s Writing Prompts for October

#17 “poison”

sad poetry
32

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  • 𝐑𝐌 𝐒𝐭𝐨𝐜𝐤𝐭𝐨𝐧4 months ago

    Brilliant!

  • Cathy holmes5 months ago

    Oh damn. That is incredible. The ending is perfect. .

  • Kristen Balyeat6 months ago

    Woah, this is absolutely incredible, Zara! Stunning imagery! Your last lines are just 🔥 caught on familiar scratches ‘til i remove the needle 💫🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽💫

  • E.K. Daniels6 months ago

    Your writing style is somewhat surreal, and multi-layered with metaphor. Fantastic.

  • Babs Iverson6 months ago

    Brilliant & beautiful!!! Love it!!!💕❤️❤️

  • The Dani Writer6 months ago

    Those last three lines are a brilliant metaphor cuz I felt that. Bravo!

  • Haunting imagery. "History repeats itself", the "broken record". Full disclosure, I've read through the comments below, but I did wonder about the possibility of a double entendre with "until I remove the needle" when I first read this. The reality that most of us find ourselves as victims both from without & within & that it's not simply victorious others who lie to us but that we often lie to ourselves seemed a somewhat deeper, richer & highly appropriate texture to find in this. I must confess to some ignorance regarding the lines, "lyrical poison intoxicatingly sung deathly china white in veins" unless "deathly china white in veins" is something that happens with poison/drug use. But it's something I've not heard before--which is good as it encourages me to linger & contemplate the words more than I might if they seemed familiar. At any rate, congrats on Top Story. Intriguing, compelling, thought-provoking & evocative writing.

  • Katie Dee6 months ago

    Hauntingly beautiful!

  • Alexander McEvoy6 months ago

    Powerfully emotive, Zara Loved it! Especially the broken record part, it really spoke to me and tied the whole poem together

  • Dana Crandell6 months ago

    Incredibly well-written and emotive! Congratulations!

  • Lacy Loar-Gruenler6 months ago

    Zara, this is haunting and so beautifully written. I often do not understand poetry, but this piece grows with me as I have read it more than once. I think you are my favorite poet ever!

  • congrats on this top story Very well done

  • This was an incredible take on the prompt "Poison"! And a well deserved Top Story! It was lyrical and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this with me.

  • Dana Stewart6 months ago

    You captured the feeling of deja vu so well ‘deathly china white in veins’ Excellent imagery. Congrats on the TS 🎉

  • Congratulations This is a great Piece ♥️🎉💯📝😉❗

  • Tressa Rose6 months ago

    Very relatable. Congrats on top story!

  • Caroline Jane6 months ago

    Oh this is visceral. Beautifully done. I love the "lyrical poison" metaphor a lot.

  • Lana V Lynx6 months ago

    Coming back to congratulate you on Top Story. Keep composing beautiful poetry!

  • Abdullah6 months ago

    Loved your poem

  • This was great! Loved the imagery and the feeling this encoded. And congrats on a well deserved top story!

  • Paul Stewart6 months ago

    Saw this got Top Story, first things first, congrats! Second things second, this is awesome, in a very introspective and heartbreaking way. But, so beautifully penned!

  • Gerard DiLeo6 months ago

    Thanks for your like of my "Forever Lost." I wouldn't have discovered you otherwise. This is very powerful!

  • my life a broken record caught on familiar scratches ‘til i remove the needle These three lines resonated so deeply with me! Loved your poem!

  • Lamar Wiggins6 months ago

    Whoa! That was pretty deep. Excellent entry!

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