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Sun & Sand. Top Story - August 2023.
Evan Forrester stalked up the beach and to the beachside bar at least six steps ahead of Katie. This left plenty of room for people to not believe that they were a pair and those people innocently cut in between the two people as groups either made their ways back to the beach or up to the bar as well. A few of them were kind enough to mumble “excuse me” or “pardon me.” No one hung back and allowed her to catch back up with Evan; no one knew about the infractions that they were committing. No; it was the young group of college aged males who knowingly and indiscreetly stared at her to size her up that really bothered the brunette beauty. Had it been in her nature, she might have flipped them off. Today, she was dangerously close to that being in her nature.
By Kent Brindley11 months ago in Critique
AI sums up Vocal Media
ChatGPT and Vocal Media I am getting used to ChatGPT but find it is not always accurate and I have to do additional research. This is why I utilize it sparingly. Today I decided to find out what Artificial Intelligence would tell me about Vocal Media and found it to be quite accurate. The following is what it had to say and perhaps someone else may catch a glitch or inaccuracy that I did not.
By Cheryl E Preston11 months ago in Critique
Advice Needed: A Yam's Tale
Hello there, everyone! I am once again taking another break from my regularly scheduled fiction to publish something in the new critique community. It was created by Vocal at a perfect time for me as, sat within my memory stick, a small story opening has existed. The problem with it is... I have no idea where to go with it!
By ThatWriterWoman11 months ago in Critique
Builderall 5.0 vs. Rapid Profit Machine: Choosing the Perfect Digital Marketing Duo
In the ever-evolving landscape of digital marketing, having the right tools at your disposal can make all the difference in achieving success. Two powerful contenders that have been gaining traction are Builderall 5.0 and Rapid Profit Machine (RPM). These platforms promise to transform your digital marketing endeavors and take your business to new heights. In this comprehensive guide, we'll delve into the features, benefits, and user experiences of Builderall 5.0 and Rapid Profit Machine, helping you make an informed choice for your digital marketing needs.
By XcellentWrite11 months ago in Critique
Crisis in the Amazon
Are we living our lives as if every day is a new fairytale unfolding. Granted, some fairy tales are far more wonderful for some than for others. There are people surviving day to day in not so fairytale like conditions, yet are doing more for the ecological survival of the planet than those who seem completely oblivious to warnings of "Less is More". If we are to continue to survive safely, we need to wake up to the reality of that which is unfolding around us. This is not a storied fairytale.
By Novel Allen11 months ago in Critique
A Sapphic Story I wrote in 2008
Carol Patience sighed as her back was fixed against the purple sheets on the bed. The seventeen year old thought it was a very strange way to celebrate her birthday. Lying on her bed, semi naked whilst her girlfriend, was somewhere around the flat. Carol stood up and stared at herself at the rectangle shaped mirror on the wall. She certainly noticed that her changes from two years ago. Never would she have thought that she would have a girlfriend, around twice her age. Carol was fourteen when she first met Grace Butterfly, after being bit by a snake and found her self out of planet earth.
By Chloe Gilholy11 months ago in Critique
A Christmas Story Review
Since the Holidays are coming up, I thought I’d review a film which I think is perfectly appropriate for the occasion. And what better title to review than the timeless classic known as “A Christmas Story”? Since this movie was released in the year I was born in, this is yet another film that I’ve known pretty much my whole life. And I have seen this movie at least several times during my childhood. Now, what made this movie so special is that it wasn't really a Christmas story as the title implies, but rather, it was a drama with a few moments of humor here and there. And once you start watching it, you will quickly realize this isn’t your typical Christmas themed movie. It doesn’t revolve around the legend of Santa Claus and the myth about him traveling across the world to bring toys to children. No, this is a more realistic story that tells us that sometimes what we want isn’t really what we need. Originally released November 18th, 1983, this film is set in the 1940s, long before the time of the film's release, and long before digital age which we live in today. Anyway, the story in this film is basically a drama story told in the form of a narration by Ralphie when he has come of age, as he shares his childhood experiences with the audience about what happened to him on that particular day during the Holiday season. And needless to say, it was a Christmas that he would remember for a VERY long time. And let me tell you, this movie sure has left quite an impression on me that lasted for just as long. I watched this movie 30 years ago as a kid. And 30 years later, it’s high time I did a review of it. Though, keep in mind, I haven’t seen this movie in ages despite that I remember very specific parts of it by heart. So forgive me if some or all of these scenes are not in the correct order.
By Kylecovey Smith11 months ago in Critique
To Write or Not to Write?
This was my very first story on Vocal. I wrote it two years ago for the Doomsday Diary challenge and even though it obviously did not place in the challenge, it remains one of my most-read stories. It was published before Vocal made comments on stories possible, so it has no comments on it as of now.
By Lana V Lynx11 months ago in Critique