The Cyan of a Ulysses Butterfly
And the quietness of your voice
I could never
Figure out if
Your eyes were
The cyan of
A Ulysses butterfly
Or the cerulean
Of forget-me-nots
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I never knew if you
Smelt like rosewood
Or sandalwood but
You reminded me of
Petrichor and the
Feeling of safety that it
Is always accompanied by
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Your voice had the
Quietness of never
Being heard and so
I listened to you like
You were the orchestra
Onboard the titanic
❀
I still can’t figure out
If your smile is soft
Like the petals of
A blooming flower
Or sad like the songs
In a death scene
❀
You laugh like
You want to be happy
And I write as if
I want you to be mine
❀
I could never figure out
If loving you was
Pouring salt on my wounds
Or sewing them closed
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Ask Me In December
Introduction This is for Babs Iverson's "Ask Me In December" challenge which you can read about here When we talked about it, I said the flow and sound of the words reminded me of "Gone Till November" by Wyclef Jean which I will use to soundtrack this. It is a wonderful song.
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The chorus of birds, a symphony so grand, Melodies weaving through the landscapes grand. Their songs serenade my heart's every beat, As nature's rhythm and mine entwine and meet.🌟 @NicksKhan2 BY DeXignSHK #SHK_Writes
Nor can I. Could it be in each instance you've lifted up, both?
Brilliant & beautiful!!! Loved it!!!❤️💕💕
I love this Poppy!! So beautiful!!
I love the orchestra on Titanic line.
This just gives you all the feels!
The opening line is everything! Wow! And the rest lives up to the first! Congratulations!
Realy Enjoyable
Very thoughtful and fills your senses…ty
Really enjoyed it, well done!
Beautiful! Each stanza was mesmerizing. I like the progression of sight, smell, sound, and touch in the first few stanzas.
Beautiful... Outstanding work!!!
I love this Poppy; the raw pain amidst the beauty. Well done!
Love the melancholy tone, the contrast emotion of love really leaps off the screen. Great work!
Beautiful ❤️ The last two lines captivating ❤️ Congratulations on Top Story!
Wow this is amazing! I loved all of the comparisons but my favorite by far was the end. Well done!
Oh goodness, I loved this Poppy. I loved the comparisons and the contrasts. I especially liked the lines about sounding the like choir on the titanic. This was honest and emotional. Bravo :) Congratulations on Top Story!!!
Simply sublime. I did have to look up "Petrichor", and then was like "oh yeah." All of your wording is perfect to convey the feelings being expressed. Loved it. Congratulations on your Top Story!
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This is absolutely beautiful. Congrats on the Top Story.
Visceral - intensely deep are the words when a soul speaks. Thank you for sharing
Excellent ❤️
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Those last few lines are so raw. Excellent Hearted. Congratulations on top story!!
This was so yearning and beautifully written. Loved the word choices you made throughout!