The Calm of the Sea
Like us - not always what it seems
Hypnotically rhythmic,
Pushing steadily shoreward,
Swells timed perfectly.
Rising.
Falling.
Placidly gliding ahead,
Keeping the pace,
Minding the distance.
Peaks curling gently
Until gravity wins,
Then folding in a graceful arc
To be absorbed once again.
Clockwork.
Choreographed.
Just beneath the glassy surface - turmoil.
A world of chaos, unseen.
Roiling.
Swirling.
Churning its captives into fodder for the beasts.
Mind the troughs,
Lest they draw you to the dark, quiet depths, below.
Beware the peaks
Lest you be cast blindly away, to fall,
Who knows where.
Ride if you dare.
Glide with the persistent, pulsing thrust
To be welcomed by the sandy shores -
Or shattered on the rocks.
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A metaphor? Perhaps.
An entry for Vocal's "Smooth" Challenge.
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About the Creator
Dana Crandell
Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.
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Lest they draw you to the dark quiet depths below~ that was crazy good! Well done Dana!
I've come to appreciate nature so much since last year; however, after some time lots of introspection, I've realized that the part of nature I appreciate the most is the ocean, and so I've been seeking and soaking (haha, water adjectives) up as much aquatic content as I can. Thank you for making this, and I wish you the best of luck in the Smooth challenge!
Awesome imagery. I love poems about nature with a deeper meaning. Congrats, Dana!
Wow, so gorgeous and rhythmic— a beautiful poem about the water, but also felt those life parallels to my core. Gorgeous work, Dana! Your poetry…🤯
I am sorry to be late to the party on this one pal after Top Storydom and placing on the leaderboard, this is stunning though. Recently, your poems have been on an even higher level than usual! It's humbling and also so great to see and read! Well done and an awesome entry!
Very smooth Dana.
Congrats on this awesome top story Dana! ☺️👏
This is such a great metaphor!! I know you weren't totally sold that it is one but from my perspective it felt like one! This was relatable to me on how I feel about people or even how people might view me. Peaceful on the surface but there's a whole back of shit happening below the surface. Or even the reverse too when I look busy but no one's home upstairs! This was so beautifully written and was cause for some self reflection for me! Great work Dana and congrats on Top Story! Also good luck on the challenge!
AHhhh! The sea. Nothing is calmer. Meditative and calming, your words bring peace.
Congratulations on achieving top story status!
Those last two lines...so good!!! This was an imagery feast :) Fantastic work, Dana :) Congrats on Top Story!
congratulations on TS. This was really wonderful. I never thought of waves like that but I will from now on. Beautiful insight. I love it.
Congratulations Excellent choice for vocal to pick this
I can see that your great sense of rhythm manifests in many ways. Congratulations on top story!
Loved this, Deliciously Naughty! Congrats on Top Story
Congrats on the TS.
Adore it! Fantastic work! Dana, this is absolutely lovely ❤️😁.
I was literally compelled to open this. Because a. You wrote it and b. I am obsessed with the sea. Hypnotically rhythmic 💯
Brilliantly written!!! Loved you nature poem!!!💕❤️❤️
Excellent interpretation of the challenge… I love waves. I can’t surf but like boogie boarding (not sure if you use this term where you live..) so I really liked all the feelings associated with that which your poems skillfully captures. 🌊 ☺️
Two words came to mind once I was done reading this and they are, "Hauntingly beautiful"! This was such a magnificent poem!
Love it! Great job!
Fantastic buddy, had me surfing even though I never have before 😊😊
Well done and a great entry for the challenge
Great entry! 💕