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The Bird Song

A look into birds.

By Deasun T. SmythPublished 11 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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The Bird Song
Photo by Frank Eiffert on Unsplash

A peacock who is vain

A duck happy in the rain.

A raven who’s heart is black

An owl going in for the attack.

An ostrich who pecks the runt

A seagull who’s on the hunt.

A hummingbird who beats so fast

An albatross’s wings are very vast.

A bluejay who thinks he’s 'cool’

A cuckoo who’s very cruel.

A crow with a creaky voice

A robin with a difficult choice.

An eagle that says ‘hi!”

(A mouse that says ‘bye!”)

A chicken sitting in a brood

A magpie in a bad mood.

A sparrow singing a song

And a chickadee within a throng.

(I am currently celebrating my 1st year anniversary on vocal. It’s been 1 year since my oldest story on vocal has been published. The Epic Poem of Raymond. May 24th. And from that humble beginnings, I’ve felt like my writing has really grown, and my horizons have really expanded. Like most people I joined because of the chance to win $10,000 from the Fantasy Prologue Challenge, (I wanted to join since the Return of the Night Owl) and that since then I’ve been writing for over challenges and/or just for fun. I’ve had the privilege to share my vocal experience with many talented writers:

Veronica Coldiron

Mariann Carroll

Mike Singleton (Mikeydred)

Cosimo Crupi

Gina C

HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)

Cathy Holmes

Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

And so many, many more.

Good luck to all of you, and heres to 1 year more! 🍸)

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About the Creator

Deasun T. Smyth

I’m a First Nations 16 year old young man, probably an old soul (not that there's anything wrong with that). I live in Saskatchewan, and I love reading, writing, conlanging, and collecting sarcastic T-shirts.

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  • Novel Allen10 months ago

    I am just meeting this story, but everything comes in its own time. This so well describe the moods of all the birds. Really nice.

  • MARIE ODEMS 11 months ago

    AMAZING WORK!!!!!!!!!!

  • Ranjan Baral11 months ago

    Beautiful poem to read, remember, and share...

  • Caroline Jane11 months ago

    Poetic and musical too. I can hear this. Love listening to birds. Congratulations!

  • Mateusz11 months ago

    This piece of writing is simply brilliant

  • Dariusz 11 months ago

    your creativity and power in writing are truly commendable. Well done

  • Idris oladipupo11 months ago

    Amazing

  • Inkweaver11 months ago

    https://vocal.media/theSwamp/the-small-moment-that-changed-everything

  • Carol Townend11 months ago

    I think it's about the different moods of nature and writing. I love it!

  • Sophia jack11 months ago

    i don't understand lol.

  • samrin mohammadi11 months ago

    what do you do that your work gets reads, mine barely get seen

  • Kristen Balyeat11 months ago

    What an awesome poem, Deasun! This is so clever and fun! Such a great read! Happy one year anniversary and congrats on top story!! 💫🎉

  • Awesomeeee you got a Top Story for this! Congratulations!

  • Motivational Bucks11 months ago

    OSM

  • BEING_WISE11 months ago

    nice bro keep going...!

  • Doc Sherwood11 months ago

    Love the rhyme-scheme and metre! These really help your subject take wing.

  • Manish Kumar Verma11 months ago

    Very Good....

  • Heather Zieffle 11 months ago

    Congratulations! I love birds, and this was so accurate :)

  • Jacob Damian11 months ago

    well done i like reading from you keep it up

  • Sonia Heidi Unruh11 months ago

    Cheers! Subscribed and looking forward to year #2!

  • Very good

  • Real Poetic11 months ago

    I love this poem. Absolutely beautiful.

  • Mackenzie Davis11 months ago

    Congrats on your anniversary! And great job on TS! I want to read more from you. 😊

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