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Stepping Off

For the Eclipse challenge

By Hannah MoorePublished 3 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
Stepping Off
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Ever get the feeling you've been cheated?

Cuckolded, tricked or deceived?

Lied to, taken for a ride to

Imply they have what you need?

Perhaps there's something you're missing, something that cannot be bought.

Something you turn to the skies for, to seek what your heart always sought.

Each moonrise a boon to be greeted, each sunbeam a gift to be caught.

inspirational

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Comments (17)

  • L.C. Schäfer3 months ago

    The rhythm of this is beautiful and satisfying 😌

  • Gina C.3 months ago

    I really enjoy the cleverness and rhyme in this! I especially love the last line - it brings the quirkness together with a finishing elegance. Also, "cuckold" is new for me -- I'll be adding that to my list of cool words :)

  • JBaz3 months ago

    Great use of the word "Cuckold" Cuckolded, tricked or deceived? This is a very clever piece

  • Novel Allen3 months ago

    There is a lot of that going around these days. People using your attempts at kindness to their advantage. But one rises above it all to become the bigger person. Always i turn to the sky...down here is a shiteshow. Onward and upward we go.

  • Paul Stewart3 months ago

    I loved that I scanned and saw "cuckolded" as the opening for the C line...unique...this made me think a lot...but had a positivity to it.

  • Oh wow, I especially loved that last line! So powerful and optimistic! Loved your Acrostic!

  • Teresa Renton3 months ago

    As well as the symbolic last lines, I love how you’ve crafted the beginning of the poem to engage the reader 😊

  • Joe O’Connor3 months ago

    This one flows really well, and I like the subtle shift in tone from beginning to end, especially with “ each sunbeam a gift to be caught”. Nicely done Hannah 👏🏾

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    I loved the rhythm of this as well as the message. Well, I loved what the poem was trying to highlight. That's what I meant.

  • Kodah3 months ago

    "something that cannot be bought." Very creative acrostic! Love your poem! 💌

  • Grz Colm3 months ago

    Very much liked the feel of this one. I don’t think I’ve read many that rhyme. Great job! Those last two lines are particularly magical!

  • John Cox3 months ago

    DK's comments are spot on, Hannah. And on top of that, your final line rocks! Exceptional poem.

  • D.K. Shepard3 months ago

    Love how the pivot from questions of discontent to the epiphany in the later lines was so smoothly and seamlessly executed! Very nice!

  • Caroline Craven3 months ago

    This was excellent…. Especially the last two lines.

  • Heather Hubler3 months ago

    Wow, Hannah, this was just so wonderful. I read it like 5 times just to enjoy it again and again.

  • Cathy holmes3 months ago

    This is beautiful, especially the last two lines.

  • Andrea Corwin 3 months ago

    I loved the last line especially! Great job!

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