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Pining Away

Red Shift

By Andrew C McDonaldPublished about a year ago 1 min read
Pining Away
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A pine box …

Lowered… slowly, daintily … lower..

Into the dirt…

Within lies my universe…

The end all and be all of my very being

As if a bone sucking vulture

Feasted on my still breathing corpse

I feel it …

Marrow of my mortal bones

Sucked into an all consuming

Black hole of grief…

When your heart stopped beating..

Mine stuttered to a standstill..

When your blood ceased flowing,

Bearing cleansing and life to your body

Mine chillled.. slowed… froze

Now a clotted sluggish, polluted creek

Which once was a roaring river of ecstasy

When your mortal remains stilled..

Whirling galaxies were blasted

By a myriad of supernovas

Red Shift became a blue blur

As my personal reality succumbed to

The final Apocalypse…

…… …..

A pine box …

Lowered

A handful of dirt

Tossed

A universe

Imploded

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About the Creator

Andrew C McDonald

Andrew McDonald is a 911 dispatcher of 30 yrs with a B.S. in Math (1985). He served as an Army officer 1985 to 1992, honorably exiting a captain.

https://www.amazon.com/Killing-Keys-Andrew-C-McDonald-ebook/dp/B07VM843XL?ref_=ast_author_dp

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  • Brenton Fabout a year ago

    So sad, but laid out with a perfect defiance and a loving proud heart! Sorry for your loss.

  • Your poem captured Devastation very well. I felt it in every word and line. You did an awesome job on this!

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