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Petals

Poem about pretty poison

By Silver Serpent BooksPublished about a month ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2024
Petals
Photo by Sara Cervera on Unsplash

I tore off your petals.

Shoved them in my throat.

I choked and choked and choked

Until I managed to swallow down

The poison in the pretty pink petals of you.

.

I went back for the seeds,

Plucked them from you too.

They filled my stomach, infiltrated my blood,

Turned something in me sour and rotten,

Then bloomed with their fatal poison.

.

I hallucinated that you loved me.

The colors were vibrant.

Sweet on my tongue like hibiscus,

Soft in my belly like soup,

The world was pretty again.

.

And you were the prettiest.

A blooming flower amidst a field of thorns.

I waded into the violent sea,

Turned crimson from the waterfall down my flesh

But the injuries didn't land in my reality.

.

Because I was hallucinating

Pretty little dreams of you.

I was plucking your petals,

Eating your essence whole

And letting those poison seeds do their work.

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Silver Serpent Books

Writer. Interested in all the rocks people have forgotten to turn over. There are whole worlds under there, you know. Dark ones too, even better.

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Comments (22)

  • Dr. Jason Benskin26 days ago

    Congratulations on having your story featured as a top story on Vocal! This is a remarkable achievement, and it's clear why your work has received such recognition. Your storytelling is truly exceptional. The narrative was not only compelling but also beautifully crafted, holding my attention from start to finish. The way you developed the characters and plot was masterful, making the story both engaging and thought-provoking. Your unique voice and perspective shine through, setting your work apart. It’s evident that you poured a lot of passion and effort into this piece, and it has certainly paid off. I look forward to reading more of your incredible stories in the future. Keep up the fantastic work! Best regards, Dr. Jay

  • S.J. Frederickabout a month ago

    I really liked this a lot. Great job!

  • L.C. Schäferabout a month ago

    "I hallucinated that you loved me" - best bit!

  • Natasha Collazoabout a month ago

    Gorgeous!!!

  • Poppy about a month ago

    This is breathtaking. "I hallucinated that you loved me." That line broke me😭😭omg

  • Kodahabout a month ago

    Beautifully done as always! Your poems I swearrrrr!! Always gives me chills! Incredibly done, Silver! 💌

  • Dawnxisoul393artabout a month ago

    The act of tearing off petals and consuming them symbolizes a toxic and consuming relationship, the portrayal of hallucinations and the distorted perception of love add layers of complexity to the poem, highlighting the allure and danger of falling into illusions, it leaves us with a haunting impression of the destructive power of self-deception, we‘re deeply moved by the poem, loved it, and hope to read more of your work, thank you very much again for sharing this spiritual journey that touched our hearts, subscribed.

  • Kay Husnickabout a month ago

    This metaphor is so heartbreakingly beautiful. I think this might be one of the best poems I've read this year.

  • Kathy Tsoukalasabout a month ago

    This is beautiful - I am going through something similar to this! "I hallucinated you love me..." I know the feeling, especially at the moment. Love the way you captured the feelings with this beautiful imagery!

  • Real Poeticabout a month ago

    So heartbreakingly beautiful. Congrats! 🎊

  • D.K. Shepardabout a month ago

    Congrats on Top story, Silver!! The first stanza really set the tone and the clever metaphorical foundation! Just excellent!

  • Raihana H.about a month ago

    When you're blindly in love, you just don't see the red flags until it's too late... Congrats on top story!!

  • Christy Munsonabout a month ago

    Congratulations on Top Story! 🥳 Most fascinating tale!

  • Alexandria Stanwyckabout a month ago

    Congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉🎉 What a great reminder that pretty doesn't always mean safety.

  • Alexander McEvoyabout a month ago

    😮 “i hallucinated that you loved me” Wow that line in particular was brilliant Silver! The whole thing was really good, I loved the imagery of poisoning oneself the way you describe, but that one line was something special! Congrats on Top Story! Very very well earned!

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a month ago

    Reminds me of Phantom Thread. Excellent work

  • Kelli Sheckler-Amsdenabout a month ago

    BAM!💥

  • Paul Stewartabout a month ago

    This is stunning - that pretty poison of a toxic relationship. As ever, you have this way of words that just leaves me feeling very envious at times! Well done on this fiery piece and congrats on the Top Story.

  • ROCK about a month ago

    If I had a mic, I would drop it. Damn Serpent this is scandalously superior work.

  • Catsidheabout a month ago

    Often, we don't know it's poison until too late. Fantastic work!

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Wow! Enough said!💕

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