On a gentle slope before the valley, we stopped to rest a while
A poem
There is a spot for you and I on a gentle slope
Before we reach the valley
Where we can stop, hand in hand
Beneath the boughs of spring
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Here we can sit and breathe in
The scent of that playful maiden
For she was here not too long ago
And left a skirt of blossoms
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We can lie and wait a while
On this carpet soft with dew
And you and I can trace that warming wind
Blowing from the south.
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There! I see the long eared rabbit
Bounding ahead of the sun
But ah, you spy the hunting hound
Racing close behind.
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And we will track their progress north
Into the valley, you and I
Towards that ragged grey blue line
That warns of rocks and mountains.
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But still there is time to fall
And swirl laughing into the sky
Where we can play and chase each other
Eternally from east to west
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Before drifting back hand in hand
To a gentle slope before the valley
For a skirt of blossoms left behind
On a scented spot soft with dew
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Just you
And I.
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Thank you for lingering
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Comments (39)
The imagery is fabulous!!! Congratulations on the April Top Story!!! Love this!!!
A beautiful tone and images. Very enjoyable!! 😊👍✨
I love the Thank you for Lingering as the the last line.
Beautiful! Congrats on top story!
Loryne, the imagery you painted is exquisite...loved the lyrics down to the core.💗
From my slumber I arise Drinking dew from blades of grass Blinking drops off from my eyes Spring's come here at last * Gentle winds caress my ears Giving my soft kisses With winter gone, I no longer fear Of Jack Frost's bites near misses * Upon the slope the garden's full A child of nature's domain The mother's shaped the land From her hills and valleys to her plains * Upon there I see grizzly bears Eating moths from out the rocks Their gluttonous feast of powerd wings Begins and never stops * The rabbits scan the scene Hopping out of their dens to eat Upon hearing the wolves breathe They take up quickly to their feet * From Nature's Bounty To Nature's Harvest Nature in Spring Has come in full earnest
Beautiful!
So vivid
Wow... Loryne this is *beautiful*. A crisp, clean breath of spring-fresh air... and a sojourn of two dear amí to accompany. Thank you for making me want to linger in this moment.
Amazing
A perfect read with my morning coffee. Just lovely. Your words painted a languid, intimate scene. I enjoyed it :) Congratulations on Top Story!
Thoughts full of pleasantries woven into this poem... It feels good! Congrats!
Just subscribed. No idea what took me so long. Big heart emoji
It is indeed a lovely piece and a refreshing find amongst top story poems. It hearkens me.
Enchanting poem. Beautiful creation Loryne. Congratulations on the TS recognition. It’s where is should be. 😎🥰🥇
Congrats on your top story. This poem feels like an ethereal dream world I want to visit.
Congratulations on the well-deserved Top Story!
Congratulations once again for a well written piece and deserving
Nice piece and Congratulations on your Top Story✨🎉💖🎉🎉🎉🎉
Beautiful piece. Congrats on the top story.
Congratulations on Top Story!!! I expected nothing less :)
Congratulations on your gorgeous top story
Really really appreciate this. It calmed me down. Beautiful 🤩 just beautiful 😍
Lovely! A beautiful meandering through nature and such a perfect poem for spring! Congrats on Top Story!
So gentle and rolling! Congratulations on receiving the recognition of a Top Story for taking the reader on this contemplative journey.