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Not to Fight the Dragon, Then

Mother Combs' 6W6L "November Rain" Challenge

By Mackenzie DavisPublished 5 months ago 1 min read
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Inside the empty Brobdingnagian hose, dreams

lay dying as drowned canopy down.

A wee fireman plucks what’s left,

the watery serpent drained away, below;

Autumn’s arson was arrested yellow. There

glow nothing-splashes of a new November.

                   

                    

A/N: Mother Combs' challenge below.

If autumn leaves of red, orange, and yellow could be imagined to be a fire-breathing dragon, then this little boy was hoping to fight that beast with a ginormous yellow fire hose. But the street had a drain, and the rain came first, making his hose remain empty in all the wet with not even a puddle to splash in.

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About the Creator

Mackenzie Davis

“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll

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Copyright Mackenzie Davis.

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  • JBaz4 months ago

    ‘A wee fireman’. That in itself was wonderfully visual and brought back childhood imagination. This is beautiful

  • Paul Stewart5 months ago

    Well now. Showing your genius again, Mackenzie. This is great and sorry only just got to it! Fine piece of writing!

  • Poppy 5 months ago

    'Autumn’s arson was arrested yellow' is an amazingly gorgeous line!

  • Grz Colm5 months ago

    Great job! A very creative entry Mackenzie!

  • Your poem freaking blew my mind! I also learned a new word, brobdingnagian. I can't even pronounce it, lol! This was such a wonderful poem!

  • Roderick Makim5 months ago

    this is great :)

  • An imaginative take on the challenge.

  • Alexander McEvoy5 months ago

    Oh wow! I love learning new words :) This was a really sweet poem, Mackenzie :)

  • Cathy holmes5 months ago

    Wonderful. "A wee fireman" gave me a huge smile.

  • Hannah Moore5 months ago

    That poor disappointed little fireman! I must admit, I needed the explanatory note, but with it, it all came together.

  • Mother Combs5 months ago

    Bravo! Well-done. Love it. <3

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