Love fall
On a calm lake edge, we fall
deep into a blue sky
hot sand in the sun
warm on our feet
we get lost, you and me
on a red sky dusk, we fall
deep into a blue rain
a look of joy in our eyes
a tear cold on our skin
on a tiny whim, we fall
deep into a blue nite
shy with, you and me
we ask, how can air glow?
how can love feel this way?
on a long tree line, we fall
deep into a blue lush
we slip away, as we fade
into a lazy morn,
hazy fog
hand in hand, soul to soul
on a grey moon beam, we fall
deep into a blue eden
on a wish, we sail into
a mist
your lips part mine
as a spray of ocean
lays down
on a flow of surf, we fall
deep into a blue sea
our lust set free to burn
in a heat from a fire
only we can melt into
over and over, we fall
we fall... we fall
deep into a blue gulf
wave from wave
on a tide of love
we hold onto a rush
of wind in a gale
on a calm draft of air, we fall
deep into a blue for ever
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I love this, reading it feels just like falling love 😁 Like being on drugs, but also beautiful 😁
Hi i - Whew how 'Heartsy' are you - j-bud
Everything glows with new love. Here is hoping that it stays that way.
'we ask, how can air glow?' Is a STUNNING line! Thank you for writing this!
Will, this was so beautiful and moving! I love that you managed to create such magic with just four letter words! Simply breath taking! 😊
Beautiful Will... Each line is perfectly crafted and flows with love!!! Great job!!!
Outstanding! Just wow. Written so personally, a surrender to the feeling. That last line is the cherry on top. Great work and entry!
Flawless.
Absolutely GORGEOUS, Will! This took my breath away!
Simply Beautiful! BRAVO!👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
Love this!!! Bold, brilliant, and beautiful!!!♥️♥️💕
Beautifully meditative and lost in love 😍
Excellent work and a lovely entry
Airy, romantic, tender, sweet, soft and amazing. Great, fantastic poetry
This is amazing, start to finish
Excellent! I felt as though I was there with you.
Beautiful poem. Well done. 🥰
Oh goodness. That is magnificent. Really well done, and a strong entry for the challenge, imo.
Beautiful! Very well done!
This is so romantic! Well done, my friend!
That was so calmingly beautiful!! ❤️❤️❤️
Okay, Invisi, I gotta say that I fell for this one, over & over again. Hypnotic in its cadences & repeated phrases.
I felt like I was tumbling through your words as I read this. Well done!
Timeless and vivid. Sweet sensations! And a whole lot more wrapped up in this piece. Great job!
This felt like a very slow and calm type of love. A love that feels safe and reassuring. So beautiful and I loved it so much!