Glory days
inspired by the 'In Eclipse' challenge
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Entertained by flashlight tag and neon roller skates, our
curtain call was dusk when street lamps
lit on Jordache jeans and jellies on our feet. The only
'i' things we obsessed over were ourselves cos we were epic. We made
passing notes in class an origami art and cruised the streets with
sub-woofers pounding out that bass. But the glory of those golden days is now forever
eclipsed by computers in our pockets.
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Thank you so much for reveling in the old days with me :)
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Comments (18)
Nice! Memories of younger years are good for all of us! Thank you!❤️
Heather this one took me back, ah the good old days. I miss them. Your poem was so good I didn’t realize it was an acrostic until I read it for the second time
Wonderful. Your writing sent me back to the streets, where we played until sunset, skipping, running, and whatever else was there. You are right; now everything is in the pocket. And to be honest, we also gathered aggression and anxiety from this computer eclipse.
This is brilliant, I hope it places 😄
This is great! It's fun but poignant - kids really are growing up in a different world now
this is great!!!
Your last line, isn't that the truth. Loved your nostalgic and beautiful Acrostic!
I like your approach with this one, lighthearted and not so serious. Well done
No. Stop. This is so cute and takes me back to my youth.❤️🩹
Ah, the days of youth loving activities and outdoor living in joyful colors of enjoyment. Nostalgic and hoping for a return of epic.
Wow, seem like those golden days were really fun.
Nostalgia followed by the gut punch of tech, nice. I really liked this one! Growing up with cellphones but not yet smartphones, it's amazing how much it actually did eclipse. Pretty much everything! Great poem.
Love the nostalgic feel of this! All those bright little memories. ❤️ It's so sad that these "youngins" or newer generations have all this magic replaced by their cell phones. Amazng eclipse poem!
Ah, a nostalgia trip. Nice.
Sadly brilliant Heather. I smiled at ‘passing notes in class an origami art’ 😊
Cause we were epic - love that line.
Nailed it!
You are rocking!!!💕❤️❤️