I'm a ghost to you; you're a ghost to me
Nothing's as it was; nothing comes for free
You pay with your tears; I pay with my dreams
You play with the fears; I play with extremes
It seems...
You're a ghost to me; I'm a ghost to you
Masks on tired faces, feelings deep perdue
Things we truly wanted but feared to pursue
Now are buried elsewhere; hearts laden with rue
One day, will they spew?..
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Andrei Z.
Overthinker.
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The Dangling Bead
My life is splashing before my eyes, as I precariously suspend and prepare for the end, the consumption of my Self and identity. I know that gravity will be the victor in this struggle. Like a pendant, slipping from the chain, the tension has caught me in this moment, bestowing one last gift of reflection. I cling desperately, questioning my purpose. Searching for comfort. And I remember…
By Leslie Staven6 days ago in Fiction
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"You pay with your tears; I pay with my dreams". What a line! Great story. :)
Perdue? Spew? Rue? Ewww... Yeah, I like this one!
One day, will they spew?.. Hope they do beautifully without anything in between. Loved this composition. Lovely!
Congrats on TS🥳
Lovely! and deep... really heart-touching.. especially the last question, "One day, will they spew?", a question in every person's mind... so thoughtfully and beautifully written....
Nothing wrong with a good spew . Congratulations
Hoping there will be much spewing soon! 🤮 Sounds cathartic in this context, which I don’t even know the context of so am just projecting my own anxieties onto this piece but alas! Nice to see you on vocal media Andrei!! 😁
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Seems Like You Though Like Me
exellent work
Beautiful work Andrei!!! Congratulations on your Top Story!!!
Splendid work! Keep the momentum—congrats!
Felt this more than I would like to admit. Beautiful.
Congrats on TS. Great piece.
Wonderful piece. Congrats on the TS
Whoaaaa, this hit me so hard! It was extremely profound! Loved your poem!
Ahhh. I feel this is me. Or has been. Very evocative and I adore your slant and end rhymes.💜
Yes. "You pay with your tears; I pay with my dreams" I felt this, though I was the one to pay with both. So well done
Love this! Playing with fear and extremes! This poem is extremely good it will cause all other writers to fear they won’t be as good! Great work!
That last line. So melancholy and then that almost subverts all the emotion that's gone before it with its casual bluntness.
Very creative!!
I feel less like they will spew and more like they will accumulate into a quagmire!
Or simply crumble into dust & fade from all memory?