g h o s t
an acrostic challenge entry
deleted and dismissed, you've got me
isolated once more, distracted,
strung out like a junkie
trading tricks for one last score.
reality can't reach me,
all i hear is your cruel ghost
calling me a cheat, a fake, a liar,
tying me to the whipping post.
i beg for you to free me
only that's not in the cards,
no, instead i lie here broken, counting sheep and fucking stars.
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Compelling and original writing
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Comments (25)
Heather, I've said it before and I don't want to seem redundant, but MAN you can write!!
Absolutely wonderful, beautifully written. Everything connects and the rhythm brings everything together.
Amazing! Go HH!
Heather this is a great entry to the Dancing with Distraction Challenge, I love the direction you went with it! It feels dark and twisted and yet so relatable! You were able to create tension and intrigue with so few words, which I clung to "like a junkie" wanting more from you! You never cease to amaze with your talent! 😊
Good luck in the challenge - this one deserves to place, it hits hard! I like that the insights say "compelling" because that's exactly the word I use for this xx
Excellent words, extremely intense
Moving and powerful as ever, my friend! The ending is just...wow! I love how you play into the multiple distractions of being hurt, and also trying to escape the hurt. Brilliantly done ❤️
That was deep!!!
Woweeeee, hammer city and nailing it, 😊
Should have known you would twist at the end!! It's a good one too!!! Loving it!!!❤️❤️💕
Dana's hit the nail on the head. May you always know tenderness, intimacy & love that's a whole lot closer to home.
Damn, that ending hits hard! Well done, Heather!
Awesome, Heather! So moving and sad and compelling. Love it 💕🙂
Those last two lines tho. Great.
At first I thought of impostor syndrome. But the counting sheeps and fucking stars made me think of insomnia and I saw that Aphotic has said that too. Regardless, I could really feel the desperation and devastation in your words! Fantastic work my fear friend!
You fired that one out right at the end. Amazing stuff, Heather! So succinct - all the words working for you on this one! Like so many have said, that last line. It wraps it up and leaves me feeling achy! Great entry, dix mille
This was beautiful but especially the ending. That last line left me breathless
This is marvellous. Blows me away. Sad and beautiful.
This is very sad poem, It would be nice how she set herself free from this cruel toxic relationship
Ay caramba, how deep and haunting!!! Epic!
Wow! This is incredible, Heather. I didn't even realise that it was an acrostic at first, I was so drawn in.
Great entry Heather! You can feel the desperation and dissatisfaction the whole way through. 💖
Damn, that's raw, especially those last two lines. Excellent work again, my friend.
I feel like there are many ways to interpret this, but I’m getting insomnia. It really does feel like being tied to a whipping post with no release in sight. The last line hits it home. Another great acrostic.
This is gorgeous, the last line is haunting! This is incredible!!