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Him
An unwavering gaze
Settling on me like
A pool of sunshine
A smile filling
Half his face like
Greenery on a map
He loves me
❀
Her
Spinning under his arm
Like a globe
Like a disco ball
Like the Juliet to
His Romeo
He loves me not
❀
Me
Memorising the way
He says my name
Marvelling at how
It sounds like
A melody
A wish
A future (his)
He laughs and
I turn to liquid (again)
He loves me
❀
Them
Vines growing
Around each other
Lips connecting like
Our stares used to
A romance book
Printed over the
Tragedy of him and I
He loves me not
❀
When all the nights
Have been been fought and
All the questions wondered
It doesn’t matter if
He loves me or
Loves me not
❀
I know, either way
He doesn’t love me enough
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Comments (6)
Oof, the realisation that he doesn't love her enough is so heartbreaking. Beautiful poem!
Lovely
You're growing more and more astounding as you write! For what it's worth, I have written, read, known and been mentored by some extremely well established poets and you are most definitely within their echelon.
Does anyone ever love someone else enough? Beautifully poignant.
I got sucked right in and everything around me faded away as I read. Masterful work!!
Wow!!! The ending was pure & powerful!!! Loved this!!!❤️❤️💕