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I would rather feel the pain and cry

a villanelle

By Caroline JanePublished about a month ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2024
I would rather feel the pain and cry
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I would rather feel the pain and cry

Than have to look you in the eye

and say I never even tried to fly

To see your lips tremble the word why?

For me to fabricate another lie

I would rather feel the pain and cry,

swallow my pride and hold my head high

and suffer the laughs as I fail my first try

than say I never even tried to fly

I may not reach the stars in the sky

I am not a capable kind of guy

but I would rather feel the pain and cry

For the choice is simple: we do or we die

And, although it is likely I will fail as I try

I would rather feel the pain and cry

Than tell you I never even tried to fly

Villanelle

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Caroline Jane

Warm-blooded vertebrate, domesticated with a preference for the wild. Howls at the moon and forages on the dark side of it. Laughs like a hyena. Fuelled by good times and fairy dust. Writes obsessively with no holes barred.

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Comments (28)

  • L.C. Schäferabout a month ago

    Well done, this is one of the harder poetry forms I think, and you made it look effortless. TS well deserved!

  • Esala Gunathilakeabout a month ago

    Congrats on your top story.

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Wonderful poem with relatable descriptions! Congrats on TS!

  • Dr. Jason Benskinabout a month ago

    Awesome writing, keep it up!

  • Azeem Writesabout a month ago

    Great and really beautiful poem. congratulation on your top story.

  • Linda Goodmanabout a month ago

    Beautiful work! Congratulations on your top story

  • Ameer Bibiabout a month ago

    Congratulations on TS

  • Anu Mehjabinabout a month ago

    Impressive work! Your poem beautifully captures the essence of resilience and determination.Well done! And congrats on your top story🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Sarah Wilcoxabout a month ago

    Congratulations on TS! I can see why, this is amazing thank you for sharing! 👏

  • Sweileh 888about a month ago

    Interesting and delicious content, keep posting more.

  • Donna Fox (HKB)about a month ago

    Back to say congrats on Top Story!!! Yay Caroline!! 🎉

  • Babs Iversonabout a month ago

    Poignantly penned!!! Congratulations on Top Story!!!💕❤️❤️

  • The Dani Writerabout a month ago

    Hoooooooooooooooo!!! This is lesson HEIGHTS! Fantastic top story! Beautifully written!

  • Cathy holmesabout a month ago

    Congrats on the TS 👏👏

  • shanmuga priyaabout a month ago

    Congratulations 🎉

  • Paul Stewartabout a month ago

    What did I say? Congrats on another well deserved Top Story!

  • Cathy holmesabout a month ago

    Part of feels this is a valuable life lesson, part of me is thinking, "damn, girl. Didn't break your leg skydiving?" Yeah, I'm nuts and possibly insufficiently caffeinated.

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Gosh this was so poignant, emotional and relatable! Loved your poem!

  • Beautifully written & so true! I especially love: ‘ I would rather feel the pain and cry Than tell you I never even tried to fly’💜

  • Donna Fox (HKB)about a month ago

    Well this was painful and relatable!! Great work here Caroline!! I love what you did here and ow authentic/ genuine this feels!!

  • Tiffany Gordon about a month ago

    Well done!

  • Kayleigh Fraser ✨about a month ago

    Beautiful 💔

  • Christy Munsonabout a month ago

    Beautiful poem.

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