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Deception

a senyru

By Cathy holmesPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
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photo by Michael podger on Unsplash

spiderweb compass

hailing the vanilla mould

of your blackened heart

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Senryu
28

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Cathy holmes

Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.

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  • Angie the Archivist 📚🪶21 days ago

    Congratulations on third place in Poppy’s March Prompts… amazing work fitting all 5 prompts into three meaningful lines.

  • D.K. Shepard25 days ago

    Congrats on placing in Poppy's challenge! Great piece using all the words in 3 lines!!

  • Paul Stewartabout a month ago

    Wow...so powerful for a senyru. Well bloody done, buddy!

  • Chloe Gilholy2 months ago

    Beautiful imagery and combination of words.

  • Poppy 2 months ago

    Damn this was good though! Fitting those words in a haiku was wonderful! I love the tone of it!

  • Hannah Moore2 months ago

    I'm coming across a lot of compasses! I love its combination with spiderweb here.

  • Celia in Underland2 months ago

    OOOOO Bloody brilliant! 🤍 Love the image of the spider web compass...can see the little spider shuffling around it as the direction of the lies change and shift.

  • Tiffany Gordon 2 months ago

    FABULOUS!

  • Hard hitting

  • Omggggg! You are so freaking brilliant! 5 words from Poppy and 5 added words, you created such a poignant yet powerful Senryu! I loved it!

  • Bonnie Bowerman2 months ago

    So beautifully sparse! Yet so powerful!

  • JBaz2 months ago

    oooh This gave me the chills

  • Amazing… to use the five word prompts to such effect!

  • Excellent take on the challenge!

  • Real Poetic2 months ago

    Queen of Senryu ❤️🥲

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Awesome!!! Profoundly perfect!!!💕♥️♥️

  • sleepy drafts2 months ago

    Ooooooh, this is sharp, Cathy. Fantastic take on Poppy's prompt. 💓

  • Rachel Deeming2 months ago

    Excellent. John's analysis was spot on, I think. I'm off now to have a look at the prompt but regardless of knowing, this was good.

  • Lindsay Sfara2 months ago

    There is so much to this, and in so few words. Beautifully done Cathy!

  • Spider web of dreams and vanilla mold is a beautiful poem

  • Heather Hubler2 months ago

    Ooo, I loved 'vanilla mould' that was such a cool phrase!!!

  • Mother Combs2 months ago

    Nice, Cathy. I don't know if I can beat that

  • John Cox2 months ago

    Wow! You managed to use all of the words in Poppy’s prompt for your Senyru. Spiderweb compass (liable to mislead - hence deception?), hailing (warning/highlighting?), vanilla mould (sweet smelling corruption?), blackened heart (speaks for itself). Very thought provoking and potent imagery. Well done, Cathy!

  • Lamar Wiggins2 months ago

    Whoa! That’s pretty deep and vivid. Nice work, Cathy!

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