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By Babs IversonPublished 2 years ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
Photo by Solaah Hussain on Unsplash

Haole wahine,

dancing the hula.

Hawaiian music,

a tropical breeze

with swaying movements

and self-expression.

From across the room,

our eyes intertwine.

Lost in the afternoon.

Drums beat, hearts pound.

Chemistry pure sweet.

Tacitly, without sound.

A true romance with

five senses enhanced.

Gardenias sweet smell.

During a sun shower,

better together.

Around the island,

LOVE in Paradise.

Around and around.

First sight lovers.

Volcanic eruptions.

Subsides into bliss.

Hearts and minds are one.

Playing in the sun.

Future plans began.

Walks along the beach.

Our own special song.

First sight love will last

because it dakine.

Writer's notes: Paradise is comfortable. Get comfortable in love.

"Dakine comes from a Hawaiian expression used originally by surfers. It is a slang/pigeon English version of “The Kind”, meaning very good, “the real deal” or exceptional." quote from - https://dakinevc.com/faq-items/what-does-dakine-mean/

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About the Creator

Babs Iverson

Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.

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  • Dawn Saloisabout a year ago

    Wonderful imagery! I’ve never been to Hawaii, but I felt like I experienced it through your poem.

  • Awww, this was so lovely!

  • J. Delaney-Howeabout a year ago

    Loved the imagery. Never been to Hawaii

  • Kelli Sheckler-Amsdenabout a year ago

    Awww, this was so sweet

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