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From Across The Room, A Love Poem

By Babs IversonPublished 2 years ago 1 min read
Photo by Nathan Dumlao on Unsplash

Upon arrival, we were about to meet.

At the airport, our hearts skipped a beat.

From across the room, eyes meeting as one.

Blue skies and aloha, in the island sun.

A carnation lei was subtle and sweet.

By providence, our lives would be complete.

A whirlwind romance the envy of many.

Our love glowed like a new copper penny.

Hawaiian luaus and pineapple fresh.

Before we knew, everything seemed to mesh.

Walking and talking along Sunset beach.

A lasting pure love was within our reach.

True love, at first sight, can and will endure.

Giving and taking would make it secure.

A red carnation lei around your neck.

Giving white lei before a tender peck,

we danced on the beach the whole night long.

Now, dreams of the Hawaiian Wedding Song.

Writer's notes: Mahalo! Aloha! This poem will be submitted to Vocal's challenge "from across the room" that will be judged by Kirun Kapur who teaches at Amherst College and serves as editor of the Beloit Poetry Journal.

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About the Creator

Babs Iverson

Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.

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  • Antoinette L Brey9 months ago

    so uplifting,

  • Gina C.9 months ago

    So beautiful! I felt the romantic dream of this ❤️❤️

  • Cendrine Marrouat9 months ago

    It's such a cute poem, Barb! Well done!

  • C. H. Richard9 months ago

    Lovely ❤️ ❤️❤️

  • Gosh this was so beautiful! Absolutely fantastic!

  • Lamar Wiggins9 months ago

    Excellent! The tone and flow of this was perfect. And the content felt really great. Thanks for sharing.

  • Jason Ray Morton 9 months ago

    that's so romantic. Makes me want to see it play out.

  • Mariann Carroll9 months ago

    I read it again and it still touch me Romantically 🥰

  • Very nice

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