Upon arrival, we were about to meet.
At the airport, our hearts skipped a beat.
From across the room, eyes meeting as one.
Blue skies and aloha, in the island sun.
A carnation lei was subtle and sweet.
By providence, our lives would be complete.
A whirlwind romance the envy of many.
Our love glowed like a new copper penny.
Hawaiian luaus and pineapple fresh.
Before we knew, everything seemed to mesh.
Walking and talking along Sunset beach.
A lasting pure love was within our reach.
True love, at first sight, can and will endure.
Giving and taking would make it secure.
A red carnation lei around your neck.
Giving white lei before a tender peck,
we danced on the beach the whole night long.
Now, dreams of the Hawaiian Wedding Song.
Writer's notes: Mahalo! Aloha! This poem will be submitted to Vocal's challenge "from across the room" that will be judged by Kirun Kapur who teaches at Amherst College and serves as editor of the Beloit Poetry Journal.
About the Creator
Babs Iverson
Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.
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I’m finally off of work from my overnight shift and now comes the hard part. I do Ride-share driving for about two or three hours after I get off of work each morning, not only to make ends meet, but to put away a little extra money for my rapidly approaching wedding.
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Comments (9)
so uplifting,
So beautiful! I felt the romantic dream of this ❤️❤️
It's such a cute poem, Barb! Well done!
Lovely ❤️ ❤️❤️
Gosh this was so beautiful! Absolutely fantastic!
Excellent! The tone and flow of this was perfect. And the content felt really great. Thanks for sharing.
that's so romantic. Makes me want to see it play out.
I read it again and it still touch me Romantically 🥰
Very nice