Enveloping lightness warmly caresses,
Cloudy, dark thoughts no more, now
Leaping into action like a super-hero, one’s
Interest renewed in fascinating places and peoples, and
Pouring out laughter in every circumstance (even inappropriate ones)
Seemingly almost human again, forgettable alien no longer, sometimes
Easier in theory than in practise..
*Written for the Vocal ‘In Eclipse’ poetry challenge, 2024.
Quick note: I was thinking of mental health related medications like anti-depressants and how they are supposed to alter your brain chemistry. I guess it depends what one is using these for, but ultimately they don’t always work for everyone or they may only work for a certain amount of time. I remember the effects many years ago, much like I’ve described above, but then things dwindled over time. Next, trying many others with very mixed results. Anyhow, I thought it could be an interesting eclipse analogy - obscuring the unhealthy darkness by encompassing lightness of mind and body.
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I can't imagine dying like this, in a place like this; on a cold, dirty pavement with rush hour traffic screaming by and a crowd looking on while paramedics struggle to find space to move. Who could? Deep down we all think there should be a reason, a moment of clarity... or a family presence, at least. For this man, this boy, the rail thin woman lighting a cigarette in a faux fur jacket will have to do - she's been here since the start, her eyes tracking the movement of my shoulders as we fight to keep him on the right side of the line.
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Nice work!!!
This is a great entry. Really well done
Very deep and relatable Grz. You did an excellent job with this.
Very creative take on the challenge. Well done.
Creatively expressed and an awesome entry!!!❤️❤️💕
You did such a stellar job coalescing these two concepts! I like the idea of mental health - light vs darkness - as a metaphor for Eclipse. You have some really powerful lines in here. I really loved" Leaping into action like a super-hero," Great work, Grz!
I think it's a great analogy.
I like how you put these two together. Eclipse can be a great analogy for this
This is incredible! What a powerful piece! The “I” and “S” lines gave me goosebumps. Great acrostic, Grz!
Excellent entry, Grz! I love your. interpretation of the prompt. 💖
I like the concept of this!! The idea of embracing the light instead of letting darkness swallow you up and the reminder that it's easier in theory than practice!! Beautifully done and so well thought out!! Great work Grz!
Good Eclipse acrostic ✅. ‘ Seemingly almost human again, forgettable alien no longer, sometimes Easier in theory than in practise..’ Reminds me of when someone kept telling me they were invisible to most people… it shouldn’t be so, but unfortunately sometimes it happens… too often people are carelessly overlooked… despite how wonderful they are.
I think this is excellent, Grz.
Whoaaaa, that was deeper than I thought it was. You executed this so brilliantly and very perfectly articulated! I was so happy to see your name in my notifications! Loved your Acrostic!
Great acrostic, loved it <3
Mental health medicine does seem to give people dark thoughts. Just like illegal drugs I am assuming. Great poetry
I like your poem very much. Dark thoughts are dangerous, but in difficult times it is hard to see the light. When you say: Pouring out laughter in every circumstance (even inappropriate ones), I think it's true, it is very important to force ourself to appreciate the small moments of joy, in recent months I have felt this way, the small positive things have slowly become enormous and have swept away a horrible period. 😊
Oh, love the concept and the execution. I've always found anti-depressants work for me, but I know it depends on person, type and dosage. This is a great entry, pal! Good to read something properly new from you! :)