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The Bag - Girl, Disrupted

A Story Every Day in 2024 May 22nd 143/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished 24 days ago Updated 24 days ago 2 min read
The Bag - Girl, Disrupted
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For those of you that are new here, this links to the following in order:

The Bag; Jason's Dilemma; The Girl; Jason and the girl; The Skewered Apple

You may want to visit those first for context.


Jason couldn't see me but I was there, on the bench, the guard watching. I only have so much influence over him. That's all I'm allowed and each time, it gets harder to pull off. It's a cruel game that my keeper is playing.

But I'm rooting for Jason. When I was taken, he was there. His memory of it will be faint but I'm hoping if I keep jogging it, he'll come to the rescue. The fact that he's now heading to "The Apple" is good.

He'll discover it's a sports' bar. Ha! Sports! That's a glossy term for what goes on there. You people, you love these games with balls and bats, but you have no idea of the continual game of pursuer and pursued that is being played around you. Nature points the way to the truth: the cat playing with the mouse; the orca flipping a seal into the air before devouring it; a fox in a henhouse.

Historically, it's been Man baiting creatures to fight. Bear baiting; cock fighting; dogs biting chunks from each other. But Man loves to abuse Man too. Think Romans - Christians, slaves, watching them battle each other to the death. For sport. Because they could and because they were different.

History repeats. Isn't that what they say? And here we are. The same theory applies. Pick on the ones who are different. Capture them, make them "lost". Give them parameters to work with but disrupt their gifts so that they are restricted. Sit back and watch the show. Threaten them with death if they don't comply. Or hurt those they love.

Before the Disruptors, I could have annihilated any threat. My knowledge of the world and how to harness the collective power of consciousness made me invincible.

The day Disruptors were created by him was a dark day for Perceptives like me.

The "good" guys.

He seeks us out as playthings. He's threatened but fascinated too. He's testing us with these trials.

I say "us": I may be the last.

Chances are I'll die but I'm not going to give up without a fight, just like all those before me.

I need you, Jason. My conduit.


366 words

So, Jason will go to "The Skewered Apple" but I've added an extra element to this now which is sort of based on Mark Gagnon's lead, although he suggested another dimension. I wonder what she means by "conduit". Is there something special about Jason? And who is the mysterious "he"?

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read this, please do drop a comment as I love to interact with my readers.


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Rachel Deeming

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  • TheSpinstress4 days ago

    The first paragraph is utterly chilling. 'My keeper'. UGH. I can't wait to make my way through all these chapters.

  • Hannah Moore23 days ago

    That conductor knows something.

  • D.K. Shepard23 days ago

    Wow! How exciting! Felt like the water was gradually getting deeper and then we stepped into a sharp drop-off! Great work, Rachel!

  • I’m just along for the enjoyable ride today… keen for the next instalment 😁

  • John Cox23 days ago

    Jason has clearly seen something that he shouldn't have and then unseen them. The first question, who did the unseeing? Jason as a form of self-defense or the mysterious 'he?' Will he experience deja vu when he enters the Apple?

  • Whoaaa, Disruptors, Perceptives, my head is spinning. Like what the hell is even going on? What did she get Jason into, lol

  • Caroline Craven24 days ago

    Intrigue levels ratcheted up to 11! Can’t wait to find out what happens next!

  • Jay Kantor24 days ago

    Rd ~ Whew...What a 'tude and you tease me. A far cry from Mum's leftover Lasagna nukes; when time permits. But, that's what makes U'z so special..! - How HollyWeird - J-bud in.l.a.

  • Mark Gagnon24 days ago

    You chose a good time to introduce your supervillain. It sounds like she isn't above reproach either. I'm interested to see how you developed things from here. Great story!

  • Katarzyna Popiel24 days ago

    Finally some clarification! Not that it explains much but at least some indistinct shapes now loom on the horizon. I wonder what Jason will manage to make of what he's been given so far...

  • Ah, a game of astral chess! Now my interest is extra piqued. One concern, however, is that she mentions being invincible. "Absolute power corrupts absolutely." This is no damsel in distress, but someone caught up in something much bigger! If Jason can help her, will she still use her power for good, or will the wrath of vengeance transplant the spirit of justice? I will get the popcorn ready! Well-wrought!

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