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The Bag - Jason's Dilemma

A Story Every Day in 2024 May 14th 135/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished 2 years ago • 2 min read
The Bag - Jason's Dilemma
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This links on from The Bag, published on May 12th, where readers decided what should happen in this story after I ended it on a cliffhanger.

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Jason had about five minutes until the train pulled in again and he could, could, hand the bag in. Not a lot of time to decide what to do.

He closed it up and placed it next to him. He wasn't an overly curious person but, for some reason, he was reluctant to relinquish the bag. When she had seen him after his frantic and quite embarrassing display at the train window, there was something in the look she gave him which made him what? Curious? Attracted? He wasn't sure what but it was making him want to hand over the bag himself.

He reached into the bag and his hand found the notebook and so, he drew it out.

Black, plain. It didn't look like it had been used much. There was no pen in the bag that he could remember.

He opened the cover. Cream paper. He was expecting a name but there was nothing written here and so, he turned another page.

Pencil writing. Smudged in places, so the graphite grey smear blurred the words. He tried to make them out. It wasn't easy because it must have been a blunt pencil used, the words barely marking the page.

He squinted. At the top of the page clearly "Plan A". Scanning down, he made out inconsequential words like "draw" and "the", "in" and "him", "leave" and "tail", maybe "trail"? There wasn't enough there to make sense of the whole. There was a doodle of a knife stabbing an apple, well-drawn, next to the words in capitals "PAY DAY! YAY!"

The train was slowing. He glanced at the page again and noticed something which made his heart start just a little. Was that Jason written there? He brought the page closer to his face. Yes, it said Jason. Curious. Coincidence? Maybe. But he felt a chill.

The train had stopped. He put the notebook away, stood, turned away from the window and hitched the bag onto his shoulder.

He headed to the doors and there she was.

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So, what happens next? Is there a confrontation? Do they have a conversation? Suggestions please in the comments and I will run with the most popular. Let's see what you come up with!

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read it, please do leave a comment as I love to interact with my readers.

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    Written by Rachel Deeming