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Long dark night

Telltale crimson trail: part 6

By Raymond G. TaylorPublished 3 months ago Updated 23 days ago 1 min read
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If I’d been a character in a detective story, they’d call this the long dark night of the soul. Drawing deep from the amber leaf, I knew why. I took in another lungful, tasting like a motorman's glove. I laughed at myself, thinking up a Chandler-Marlowe quote at a time like this.

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I threw the butt down, where it joined its buddy left by Stevie. That's not all she left. I felt a ton weight in my stomach that almost floored me.

Looking at the cheery photos on the shelf, I thought about all I'd lost. The only people who meant anything to me. My wife and my brother. Now, I'd lost Stevie too. Betrayed.

I jumped in my skin as the telephone rang. I picked up.

“John? You planning on coming in today?” It could only be the Captain.

“Sure, chief, just making some breakf..”

“Well don’t,” he said. “You need a break… see the strain in your eyes… get some rest… go see your wife or whatever you do when you’re not working.”

When I wasn’t working! I thought. When was that?

I took his advice anyway.

“Hey hon, how ya doing?” I said, holding out some flowers. Three years since we last spoke. After an hour of my inane attempts at conversation, I figured she’d had enough.

I headed home, passing another man clutching lilies, bending over another grave.

Unlocking the front door, I caught a whiff of Miss Dior with a hint of boot black.

“Stevie?”

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What happens next?

Part seven: Pretty Miss Trouble

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About the Creator

Raymond G. Taylor

Author based in Kent, England. A writer of fictional short stories in a wide range of genres, he has been a non-fiction writer since the 1980s. Non-fiction subjects include art, history, technology, business, law, and the human condition.

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  • Randy Wayne Jellison-Knock3 months ago

    So how'd she take it? Yes, I mean the wife. Though I probably should be wondering about Stevie, too.

  • Lamar Wiggins3 months ago

    Well, I'm all caught up now and man, this could go in so many directions. I will try and publish my attempt in the next day.

  • Kageno Hoshino3 months ago

    My predictions for part 7 : https://vocal.media/fiction/whispers-in-the-rain-doyi01ei

  • Kageno Hoshino3 months ago

    Great story

  • Why has it been 3 years since John spoke to his wife? Also, oooo, is Stevie back?

  • John Cox3 months ago

    Wow! I'm lovin' this Ray. Cannot wait for the next installment!

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