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By Heather HublerPublished 6 months ago Updated 6 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - November 2023
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i hope the change was seamless

from your last breath

to the next.

while your eyes

opened to new wonders,

i was left here

picking up what's left.

i miss you

and i hate it

that you wouldn't

let me follow;

cross that plane,

slip the shackles,

let worldly burdens

drift and go.

/

spread across horizons,

slung down valleys

and pushed up peaks

by stormy gales,

my love wanders

near and far

searching, always searching

for you, to no avail

because the one it's

pining for with endless

nagging grief

is the one that's

no longer kept

on this green earth,

death, a shameless thief.

/

it's been years and days

and hours since

i felt my useless

heart begin to seize

as you took the

very best of me

despite my endless

words and pleas.

so, i'll plant a field of flowers

to match the wildness

in my soul,

and hope it's the last

my eyes will see

before i join you,

then i'll finally

be whole.

____________________________________________________

Dedicated to a dear friend's heartbreaking loss and all those suffering with grief.

~

If you'd like to read something a bit different than this piece, please consider checking out the next episode of Origins with Kristen Balyeat where we discuss her amazing poem, Dear Favorite Tree:

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  • ROCK 5 months ago

    What a heartfelt craving you have expressed; delicate yet I wince with a tear. Absolutely beautiful ❤️

  • Bugsy Watts5 months ago

    This is beautiful. We often have to make the best of our pain. Sorry for your loss, Heather.

  • This was beautiful. So many of the lines in this poem were incredible but the one that really stole my attention was so, i'll plant a field of flowers to match the wildness in my soul

  • Caroline Jane6 months ago

    ❤ beautiful Heather.

  • So well written and true… Death a shameless thief.

  • Tiffany Gordon 6 months ago

    Phenomenal job HH! Well done!👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾

  • Rachel Deeming6 months ago

    Hope your friend is alright. Beautiful words, Heather. I hope they find solace in them and don't think there is any greater expression of support than in a poem like this. Congrats on TS.

  • Moe Radosevich6 months ago

    I feel, see, and live this in many levels, what an awesome dedication to piece together a broken heart, outstanding H2 ❤️

  • Leslie Writes6 months ago

    oh. This took my breath away.

  • Denise E Lindquist6 months ago

    Powerful ❤️ Well deserved top story 🎉🎉🎉

  • Lamar Wiggins6 months ago

    Lovely title for such a sad poem. The words are so relatable. Sending out prayers to all! 💖🙏🏾

  • Margaret Brennan6 months ago

    aw this is absolutely so beautiful. It truly deserves TOP Story.

  • Gerald Holmes6 months ago

    Your words have brought tears to my eyes. So beautiful and so well said. Congrats on the Top Story

  • Teresa Renton6 months ago

    Of course this is a Top Story 🤷‍♀️Absolutely beautiful and flows like silk. Congratulations ❤️

  • Death is a shameless thief indeed! This was so heartbreaking and emotional. The inevitable part of life. I'm waiting for the day I'll be reunited with my cat. I miss him so much 🥺 Loved your poem!

  • Grz Colm6 months ago

    😔 “searching, always searching”.. 🥲 A superb piece Heather. Well done & how nice to write it in support of a friend.

  • JBaz6 months ago

    Congratulations great choice

  • Heart-achingly beautiful. "and hope it's the last my eyes will see"--every day for me.

  • Daphsam6 months ago

    A deep and heartbreaking poem. Just beautiful.

  • Kristen Balyeat6 months ago

    Gorgeous! Absolutely beautiful and completely heartbreaking. Touched me deeply. Such an incredibly moving piece, Heather! Sending all the love I can muster up to your friend and to you! 🩷

  • Hope Martin6 months ago

    lol. what a day I chose to read this. I am already an emotional mess, theres a lot going on. And this literally cracked the dam. Dang. Beautiful poem. It broke my heart.

  • Poppy 6 months ago

    This is so saddening but so sweet and wonderfully written. I probably think this with every new one you write but this might be my favourite of yours! Congrats on a well deserved top story!

  • Diani Alvarenga6 months ago

    Beautiful writing!

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