Who I Used to Be
A Story in a Glass
I swirl the milk into my Thai iced tea,
Bright orange leaks down to swallow translucence.
I don't remember who I used to be.
***
Through the haze of scrupulosity
Peeks between earth a green shoot of innocence.
I swirl the milk into my Thai iced tea.
***
On the edges of her memory,
Drops of freedom cleanse her from life's viciousness.
I don't remember who I used to be.
***
When she wanders through that hallowed library,
She shrinks under the burden of experience.
I swirl the milk into my Thai iced tea.
***
She suffers not for my disloyalty,
Rough hands raw and bare of recompense.
I don't remember who I used to be.
***
My wayward girl, where is your bravery?
There will never be an ideal audience.
I swirl the milk into my Thai iced tea.
I don't remember who I used to be.
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Comments (33)
Love how the imagery is swirled through, just like the milk swirling through the tea. It's a follow from me 😊
This is so beautiful and filled with so much heartbreak and emotion. Beautifully done. So many of these lines I just wanted to linger over. Congratulations!! This is such a well-deserved win.
This was wonderful. Very elegantly written. Congratulations!
Beautiful
I really want a Thai milk tea after this. Wonderful use of imagery.
Congrats on your win! I love the repeated action of "swirling the milk into my Thai iced tea" throughout - it brings the meter and beat of the villanelle rhyme structure to life!
Outstanding, congratulations. 😀👍🍁
This was masterfully done. Congrats on the win!
Congratulations very well deserved! Beautiful!
Congratulations on your win!
Congratulations ! Well deserved !
This is powerful, meaningful, and so wonderfully done! Congratulations! 🤗 Very well-deserved 🤗
Gosh. This totally deserved to win. Great writing. Well done.
Congratulations!
A haunting villanelle in the ordinary moments with Rich descriptions. Well done and congrats on your prize! 😁👏🥳
Congratulations!
Love that last stanza
Congrats! Lovely poem
What lovely imagery. It was a well-deserved win. Congratulations!
Congratulations! Really captivating lines and a beautifully executed villanelle!
Congratulations on your win!
This was beautifully written! Congratulations, well deserved!
This is gorgeous. Congratulations on the win!
Congrats.
Congratulations!!!