We’re All So Obsessed
We’re obsessed with numbers
Every calorie and minute that inch by
Any time ever left
Every dime always spent
On any fool nearby
We’re obsessed with digits
The bright red always a wake up call
Always reminding us that we’re late
A pre-eviction notice for life
Why is nothing ever paid in time
We’re obsessed with these codes
Passwords that we always forget
Trying to scrap and save
Whatever is left of all this change
When did everything becomes such a transaction
We’re obsessed with these damn symbols
Telling us how well we play our lives
Double press X long hold O
Trying to get the high score of life
But you forgot to turn on the system
We’re so obsessed with the game
We forgot to look around, see
The power is out, the bank is empty
The fridge is bare, and the scale needs a new battery
We forgot to look around and see
We closed our eyes to humanity
Become a bunch of zeros in a discarded cheque book
Void of any emotion
Filled with debt
To the joy we used to feel back in sandboxes and swimming pools
Back to when there were so many water drops, that we couldn’t even count
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Compelling and original writing
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Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
On-point and relevant
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This was a journey. There were juts too many quotable lines, but ONE of my favorites has to be this one: ''We’re obsessed with these damn symbols Telling us how well we play our lives...'' Gorgeous writing ⭐
Brilliant! Go Oneg! 👏🏾👏🏾
Great work!! Can I ask what kind of poem is it or no type?
Amazing commentary on modern life in poem form! Congratulations on Top Story!!!
Excellent! Void of any emotion Filled with debt... fantastic words.
Well done, congratulations
It was really nice read :)
Wow! “Void of emotion, filled with debt” - so clever! I love the last two lines as well. Congrats on top story!!
Congrats on the well deserved Top Story
Congratulations on Top Story!
I liked it
Congratulations on Top Story!!
Congratulations on your Top Story
Whoaaa, this hit me hard. The bitter truth. We just chase around too many insignificant things and forget to stop to enjoy life. Loved your poem so much!
I really enjoyed this poem and super loved the ending especially - how you contrasted our obsession with numbers nowadays against the simple joy of watching raindrops in the past (perhaps childhood or perhaps even a simpler time) and not worrying about the quantity, just basking in the joy of it all. Well done, my friend!
Life perspective, poetic. 🥰
Too real. Well done
Love it, very poignant as I'm sure we all fail to see at times, or get caught up and miss the little things..
Very nice, often times we look around but fail to see 😳 nice revelations here
Love this! Always trying to get ahead but missing our lives. ❤️
So very true...'we forgot to look around and see' I feel this so much. Wonderfully worded, well done :)
Wow. This is amazing. I see a top story. Very well done.
A very pertinent observation on our situation