Touching Hope
A poem
Before I chose you,
I didn’t know how painfully sharp words could pierce
How deep their wounds would gouge
How altering the scars they left
When I chose you,
I didn’t know I chose
Slithering snakes hissing, wrapping themselves all over my body when I tried to move
Crippling spiders crawling, climbing up my feet each time I took a step
An owl hooting all night as I tried to rest
Salty water when deserted in the hot desert as I tried to quench my thirst
Rotten eggs broken and filling the air blocking my nostrils when I tried to breath
With you,
The ground beneath my feet was eggshells
Walls were sheers
Nightmares alive
With you,
The sun rained and the rain shined
Water blew and the wind ran
Fire fell and snow burned
Dandelions bloomed in winter
And lakes froze in the summer
With you,
I smelt fear
Tasted loath
Heard bitter
I saw pain
When I chose you,
I failed to see what was hiding in plain sight
Now I have chosen me
And I have seen the light
Without you,
I’m touching hope.
About the Creator
Gal Mux
Lover of all things reading & writing, 🥭 &
🍍salsas, 🍓 & vanilla ice cream, MJ & Beyoncé.
Nothing you learn is ever wasted - Berry Gordy
So learn everything you can.
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Comments (19)
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This is sublime. Really enjoyed this! Read it liked it and meant to come back to it, so here I am coming back to it. Congrats too on Top Story!
Nice piece
All about the experiences of life because experience is the best teacher
That was epic...touched me too. Reminded me of my last relationship. Loved this!!
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beautiful it is. ❤🌸
This is so beautiful!
Impressive imagery and so many striking combinations of words. Great job with this Top Story!
I felt the raw emotions so clearly in this. My favorite line, 'Fire fell and snow burned'. What a really fantastic piece :) Congratulations on Top Story!
Simply outstanding! Excellent writing, the ending is spectacular. Congrats on the top story and you have a new subscriber.
This is so beautiful and I love the ending ❤️❤️
Beautiful and Congratulations on your Top Story💖🎉✨
Beautiful top story congratulations 🎉
Lovely words , congratulations on your Top Story
Freedom is the best! Inspiring work! 😊✨
Whoaaa, that was such a powerful ending! It felt so liberating to be able to choose ourself and find the light. Loved your poem so much!
Totally relatable, and well expressed!
Oh my. Wow! This is a masterpiece! I love so many lines, 'The sun rained and the rain shined' - you captured that dizzy feeling of love, what's up is down and what's down is up. Truly, great work!