The Magician's Concierto
Rebuking the narcissist in ABC format.
(Please press play to start the musical composition, then read along for the full experience)
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Arachnids in her mind, use web to stifle tired words coming out the
bastard's mouth — stuck on the tongue, she wants an end to this
contortionists' game. Ear drums silently bleed from the
doppler effects of verbal regurgitation. Echoing and
echoing, rising above the dark magic like the swirling trails of
frankincense.
Given any chance to rectify prolific sins are thwarted by
heresy. Her trust in you corroded long before this dreary ice age.
Incredulous and serpentine, you think this is but a frivolous
joke. Deep down, you know she holds the cards. You were her
knight in despicable amour. She saw your pompous light but shared
love with you anyway. Try pulling another selfish
moment from that black hat of yours to find the ugly source of
narcissism. You can't can you! You refuse to acknowledge equality;
obsession will never kneel to righteous souls.
Perhaps, a costly misstep. An inability to discern? It's too late!
Qualified, she snaps her valiant fingers in a final performance,
releasing your oppressive energy back to the hole in which it escaped from.
Sovereignty is overthrown and collapses... Is losing this battle
tragic for you? Will you ever admit defeat? Go bask in the
ulcers that eat away at your self-centered soul, for there is no
victory here.
Wingless now, you habitually search for a
xerox copy of the one you lost. She was beautiful,
youthful and answered to every command, until you arbitrarily
zapped her out of your life like the egocentric magician you are; you haven't learned a thing...
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Lamar Wiggins
Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, mystery, true crime, horror, humor, fantasy and poetry. Take a chance, you'll be thoroughly entertained.
"Life is Love Experienced" -LW
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Comments (25)
Wow... I read slowly and to the beat and the music ended exactly with the last word I read! Powerful!💕❤️ So much talk of narcissism in the world I live in lately.❤️ I didn't even notice the abecedarian until I went back to look at the title and picture at the top.😉 I think that is the way it is supposed to flow!
Well-wrought! I have often thought that the use of the myth of Narcissus does not adequately describe such a person. Narcisuss only vainly looked on at his own reflection until he withered and died. What we now call a Narcissist is a far more malignant creature, and more often than not, its "flying monkeys" believe its target to be the "Narcissist". That is its primary and greatest illusion!
Music and rhythm. Well done. And the soundtrack was nice, too.
Absolutely wonderful writing . The battle song fits perfectly . I have lived with narcissistic partners . Love is a battlefield
Thank you for the full effect L.W. This was great!!!
Great battle song. Interesting, used of magic to get rid of a narcissist but I think if we look at a narcissist as a card we are supposed avoid such person like a plague. There so many narcissists around that’s like a trap and a black hole .
🪄🪄🪄 Master Magician: Your red carpet awaits. 💙👏💙
Holy shiii... This was incredible. The flow form one line to the next, the music (which literally ended as I finished the last line by the way), and the story being told here about this narcissist. This was great Lamar 👏🏽👏🏽
That was interesting. I think the music both added to the emotional impact, but detracted from my engagement with the artistry of the poem. Like, aided the soup but hindered the brain.
This is so damn good! They never learn.
Ooo, this definitely felt like a slam!!! Loved these lines, 'Go bask in the ulcers that eat away at your self-centered soul, for there is no victory here.' Really great stuff, Lamar!!
Wow! Hard to pick a favourite line, because I had so many... but I think this one: Go bask in the/ulcers that eat away at your self-centered soul 👍👍👍👍
This was such a fun read! Well done!
Literal goosebumps! This was amazing!! I love that you included music to go along with it!
Wingless now, you habitually search for a xerox copy of the one you lost. I loveeeeeeeeee these lines the most because it gave strong vibes of Taylor Swift! Your poem was so trueeee, profound and intense! I freaking loved it!
I am afraid I have not, though I know I have never been her equal. But how could she possibly see me when she is always looking up while the whole of my existence is so far beneath her?
Ooh. You brought your own soundtrack. Nice touch. More importantly, good writing!
You flame-broiled this challenge! YES! ✊🏾 Narcissism be gone! Go Lamar Go!👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
Omg the ending is on point!!!! You snapped on this one Lamar ! Tell him like it is!!!
Lamar, Lamar, Lamar!!!!!! BRAVO, BRAVO,BRAVO.
Woah. That was so intense. I love the added war music. It really contributes to the atmosphere. I didn't know we could add music? I'll have to try that out. As for the story, I could feel the rage in every line, a build-up of emotions until it exploded with a final cold slap. The delivery of it was so well-done. It triggered my own emotions and made me want to write my own piece. lol!
That was really powerful. Excellent entry.
Impressive! “ Given any chance to rectify prolific sins are thwarted by heresy. ” So many excellent lines.
Wow-this slaps slaps so hard! Stunning imagary and flows perfectly.🤍 I missed the vid on the first read but that music is very fitting!
great entry, Lamar