I'm really not sure what to do,
I want to break up with you.
What once was hypnotic
Now seems quite despotic:
Emotions I want overruled.
***
It's funny how soon it has turned
From something desperately yearned
To a taste very sour
More dark by the hour:
A desire that needs to be spurned.
***
The excitement that I used to feel
On the cusp of fanatical zeal
Is starting to wane
And earn my disdain
My light it's starting to steal.
***
I think about regaining space
Retreating to my carapace
Irrepairably torn
By derision and scorn;
I need to discover my place.
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Hi RD - Confession: I’ve written ‘HEARTSY’ with yours in mind! — Stand in Line for Royalties — JB
Oh wow This struck deep! Well done and wonderfully crafted! The feeling of wanting to leave but for some reason or another, not being willing. Ouch. Been there. As always, fantastic work!
Went well for a week or two, Then it all came unglued...
Ohh that words Choice was simply sublime! Loved this 🥹
I can relate all too well with this, Rachel. Beautifully expressed and so evocative. Incredibly well done 💕🙂
So poignant and relatable! Loved your limericks!
Brilliant - amusing, but also quite profound.
Absolutely brilliant, as usual!
This was so raw an so relatable on so many levels. I have felt this feeling too many times 🤍