Slippery Slope of life
Life can take you down the wrong path easily
Obfuscating relations and further muting elations
Elations of closeness and greater love to your kin
Kin of all kinds: neighbours, loved ones are all signed
Signed on to your life, even if you thought you declined
Declined the positivity for negativity and then shrined
Shrined that hopeless life of loneliness and crime
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Crime blackening your soul, saddening and maddening your folks
Folks who wanted you to grow and then achieve your goals
Goals set long ago. Working hard and getting dough
Dough to live your life, but life kneaded you a different strife
Strife taking you... down the rabbit hole and breaking you
You thought the quick money was the right avenue
Avenue to success, and the respect over which you obsess
Obsess over clout. Money and cars you call out
Out of society, feeling the good treatment vanishing
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Vanishing into nothingness, like a house of cards with weak basis
Basis of stasis. And relative ease that makes this
This false struggle be worth all that trouble
Trouble and paranoia, bringing on paraphernalia
Paraphernalia of that life of crime, like the gun that went off this time
Time to face your choices and repent
Repent your crimes, and hope it all ends.
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Author's Note: This form in which the last word in each line is used as the first word in the following line was inspired from Jazzy Gonçalves and her poem which I'll link below.
I didn't know where this poem was going when I started, I just wanted to have fun with this form. The story ended up being someone who took the wrong path in life facing realities of his choices.
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Mohammed Darasi
I write fiction, poetry and occasional articles about interesting topics. I recently created a website (just because) which I will be posting my writing in (among other things). it would be great if you check it out. https://mindpit.co.uk/
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Comments (6)
Mohammed, I really like the formatting of this poem! I love the story this poem tells and the layering of this poem, it tells the tale of the literal meaning of selling our souls and the metaphorical sense too! I love your word choices and descriptive language! Overall this is such a great read, great work Mohammed!
OHHHHHH THIS WAS SO GOOD! What a way with words you have!!! Choices can either be grand or tragic, nothing is true 😭😅 so great! I'm glad you did this 😍
I love how you started with a specific form, confined to that… but allowed words to flow uninhibited. It tells a powerful story. One wrong choice can lead to another and another, just like the final word of each line leading to the next. Well done. 👏🏼
Shows that sometimes you just need to play and trust you’ll land somewhere (referring to your writing … not your protagonist’s life choices, obvs 😂).
Very talented!
Clever, how each line starts with the last word of the previous one! 😁