taken by
the tiny shards
an imploded exploding
house of cards
every sacred
slivered flash
every hated
silvered dash
a shower
of furious pieces
a thousand
glorious faces
every wasted
moment captured
every hastened
glisten flattered
a shatter
of many varied reflections
sent scattered
in many differing directions
every second
fetched and finite
every reflex
stretched to fight
this trap, this torrent
ready to spring
it has come to take
every thing
every twitch
in every jaw
every quiet battle
in this noisy war
temporarily shrouded
backhanded mention
sly vapour clouded
in a self wrought tension
and every single
bloody time
forever crossing
every line
About the Creator
Brenton F
Every letter in every word in every line is a burden I no longer have to bear, how much is not enough, how little is too much?
I finally have an E-book!
Please buy it because I'm a shit salesman
https://www.amazon.com.au/dp/B0CKNWX3YS
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Masterful proofreading
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
Comments (20)
Amazing expression, flow, and rhymes! 😍
Potent use of imagery here... Well done! 🏆
This one felled me, Brenton, but in a good way! Incredibly well done and congrats on a well deserved Top Story! 💕😊
This is so well done. Full of emotion and flows perfectly. Congrats on a well deserved Top Story.
great work here, Brenton! Feels like a lot going on in this one in many ways... Congrats on the TS too :D
Very well written. Congratulations on top story.
Wanna read something scary (Great work no doubt)❤️
Incredible expression, Brenton! Felt this one twisting my heart and knotting my stomach as I read. Brilliant piece!
Good afternoon! Great work and congratulations on top story!
taken by the tiny shards an imploded exploding house of cards every sacred slivered flash every hated silvered dash Such intense imagery and metaphor!! Great job
what a physics
This is Good 👍❤️🎊Congratulations on your Top Story🎉
This was well done, reminds me of the james bond opening to casino royale!!
This is incredible. Well done
Lingered on quiet battle, noisy war - loved that bit!
This take on arguing (as I see it, others may read something else) is quite deep Brenton. I love the thousand glorious faces exploding out. It’s like the soul or will finally just imploding after too many years of abuse. Extremely well done.
Ooooo, this was so deep! I loved the concept you used!
Light refracts Dark attacks Splitting, weaving Laughing, grieving Into light Night doth go As in the dark We all know There we shall end Whence time hath wend But light refracts, spreads Darkness cowers From glow it dreads So when in dark I finally go Let refracted light lend it’s show
There's a tremendous amount of turmoil in this piece. Quietly, but powerfully emotive. Well done!
WOW! (Arm Aigh S Faque)