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Refraction

not just light passes from one transparent substance into another

By Brenton FPublished 3 months ago Updated 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - September 2023
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taken by

the tiny shards

an imploded exploding

house of cards

every sacred

slivered flash

every hated

silvered dash

- - - >

a shower

of furious pieces

a thousand

glorious faces

every wasted

moment captured

every hastened

glisten flattered

< - - -

a shatter

of many varied reflections

sent scattered

in many differing directions

every second

fetched and finite

every reflex

stretched to fight

> - - -

this trap, this torrent

ready to spring

it has come to take

every thing

every twitch

in every jaw

every quiet battle

in this noisy war

- - - <

temporarily shrouded

backhanded mention

sly vapour clouded

in a self wrought tension

and every single

bloody time

forever crossing

every line

social commentarysurreal poetry
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About the Creator

Brenton F

Every letter in every word in every line is a burden I no longer have to bear, how much is not enough, how little is too much?

I finally have an E-book!

Please buy it because I'm a shit salesman

https://www.amazon.com.au/dp/B0CKNWX3YS

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    Creative use of language & vocab

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    Niche topic & fresh perspectives

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    Original narrative & well developed characters

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  • Gina C.2 months ago

    Amazing expression, flow, and rhymes! 😍

  • Kendall Defoe 2 months ago

    Potent use of imagery here... Well done! 🏆

  • Harmony Kent2 months ago

    This one felled me, Brenton, but in a good way! Incredibly well done and congrats on a well deserved Top Story! 💕😊

  • Gerald Holmes2 months ago

    This is so well done. Full of emotion and flows perfectly. Congrats on a well deserved Top Story.

  • Donna Renee2 months ago

    great work here, Brenton! Feels like a lot going on in this one in many ways... Congrats on the TS too :D

  • Joe Patterson2 months ago

    Very well written. Congratulations on top story.

  • Onah chidera2 months ago

    Wanna read something scary (Great work no doubt)❤️

  • Kristen Balyeat2 months ago

    Incredible expression, Brenton! Felt this one twisting my heart and knotting my stomach as I read. Brilliant piece!

  • Alex H Mittelman 2 months ago

    Good afternoon! Great work and congratulations on top story!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby2 months ago

    taken by the tiny shards an imploded exploding house of cards every sacred slivered flash every hated silvered dash Such intense imagery and metaphor!! Great job

  • This is Good 👍❤️🎊Congratulations on your Top Story🎉

  • Jazzy 2 months ago

    This was well done, reminds me of the james bond opening to casino royale!!

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    This is incredible. Well done

  • L.C. Schäfer2 months ago

    Lingered on quiet battle, noisy war - loved that bit!

  • Andrew C McDonald2 months ago

    This take on arguing (as I see it, others may read something else) is quite deep Brenton. I love the thousand glorious faces exploding out. It’s like the soul or will finally just imploding after too many years of abuse. Extremely well done.

  • Ooooo, this was so deep! I loved the concept you used!

  • Andrew C McDonald2 months ago

    Light refracts Dark attacks Splitting, weaving Laughing, grieving Into light Night doth go As in the dark We all know There we shall end Whence time hath wend But light refracts, spreads Darkness cowers From glow it dreads So when in dark I finally go Let refracted light lend it’s show

  • Dana Crandell2 months ago

    There's a tremendous amount of turmoil in this piece. Quietly, but powerfully emotive. Well done!

  • Dee Dee Farrrrk2 months ago

    WOW! (Arm Aigh S Faque)

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